I am such a fool,
so eager was I to embrace my immortality.
That not once did I consider
how very long eternity can truly be.
With just one bloodied kiss,
she seduced me to the darkness.
I sacrificed my soul to her charms,
a willing lamb to the slaughter.
Sired in blood,
awoken from death in adulation.1
Naked, shaking, confused.
Temples pounding,
searing birth pains,
raging hunger.
And so she laughed,
mindful of her own siring.
She beckoned me to her.
‘Come my love, feed with me.’
she whispered softly,
biting into my flesh.2
I tensed in suppressed euphoria,
before finally succumbing
to guilty pleasures
and fading inhibitions.
I bit into her, drank deeply
and fucked her with a passion
I have never before known.
Such perfection,
such ravenous beauty,
such bloodlust…3
And so the hunt began,
the scent on the wind,
the fear in their eyes,
the lust in our souls.
Oh the games we played,
Stalked, cornered, terrified.
The heartbeat of prey,
forfeiting life in it’s betrayal to my ears.
Sweet life blood seasoned with fear.
Oh how we fed…4
We made bitter sweet love
in the falling ashes of Pompeii.
We kissed without abandon
as Rome burned and perished.
I held her in my arms
at the fall of Arcadia,
with a love so all consuming
and never ending.
We walked in eternity
with a passion transcending the ages.5
For a millennia,
we slept in the shadows.
Unseen, unknown, forsaken.
Feeding in the velvet darkness
on the flesh of the lost and weary.
We watched as nations rose,
We fed as civilizations fell.
Growing ever bolder
in our twilight playground.
Gods among mortal men…6
But alas, all must finally perish.
All must turn to dust
and try as they may
to find peace in eternal slumber.
I lost her… my beloved dark angel…
Impaled as she slept
by hunters of our kind.
She shrieked a curdling, fearful death cry,
and I awoke with a terror unsurpassed
since I was mortal.7
I leapt into the air with great lustre,
ripping apart the nearest to me.
I bellowed my rage at them,
swatting arrows out of the air
with a focused agility unknown to me.
They scattered and fled into the night,
my rage unfed, my thoughts in flux.
I held her in my arms, weeping
as she looked into my eyes
one final time.8
‘I shalt live again, my love… find me ’
she whispered softly
and crumbled to dust in my arms.
I shrieked my raging sorrow
into the darkness.
I ran into the night,
their scent still fresh in my nostrils.
My vengeance was unmatched
by any before me.
Such carnage, such cruelty, such gluttony.9
I sired their children,
I raped their women,
I fed them to their heirs.
And so their village burned
from time and memory
in a wake of blood and fire.
None lived to recant my fury,
none lived to regret their transgressions.
Even the sired children perished
in the rays of the rising dawn.10
Yet despite the justice
of my dark fury,
I found I was unable to draw satisfaction
or solace from my brutal vengeance.
Without her, I’m an empty, hollow shell,
heartbroken and alone,
without purpose or reason.
And so I slept,
untouched by eternity
as the decades came and centuries passed.11
Awoken only by a mournful lullaby
that heralds to my soul
that she walks this Earth once more.
Yearning, stirring, awakened.
I rise with purpose,
shaking off the murky shackles
of deepest slumber.
Ravenous, I feed and brave this new world,
searching, craving, tasting her very essence
on the edge of darkest perception.12
Fear thee not my love, fore soon I shalt be with thee once more…13
Author notes
For Pastel...
This is kind of a story/free-verse hybrid. Hope it works...
If you wish to read part two of this poem, go to http://storywrite.com/story/show/256040
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Comments
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Wow this was a powerful and interesting story. Thank you for entering, good luck
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amazing and powerful
i adored this story of love and pain together in one. the fear can show through and the pain of the loss shows even more. Thanks so much for entering this contest.
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wow
thank-you for entering i will be reviewing all of the finalists momentarily! -
wow. this was breath taking. i almost cried when she died. stupid vampire hunters. i love the last line. it shows how he really did love her, how he will always be connected to her. very good job!
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Is this supposed to be poem? Really good, though I am a little confused on whether it's a poem or a story...
LOL, good luck in the contest!
-Lynn
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Lol! It's kind of a hybrid between the 2.
I've been messing around with the concept lately, this was the first. Limit myself to 10 lines a verse/stanza to tell a bit of the story & try to make it flow like poetry...
Thank you for your kind words, it is very much appreciated. Glad you liked it...
Take care,
Fritz........
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wow!
Beautiful! Simply beautiful, gorgeously written! WOW! I am so impressed! Marvelous! Excellent job! The imagery in this just blew me away!
-Lissy
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Awesome. This is more like a story in verse than an actual poem, and the images you create are so vivid. Great job, thanks for the entry!
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So, I've already read and commented this, and I still feel the same way about it, it's a powerful and well written peice, great job!! I think you're a finalist, hehe =DD
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It's dark and beautiful. Love and revenge, too very strong emotions, and it tells quite a tale in so few words. It's great. Keep it up.
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Wow. this was great, i absolutely loved it! amazing. So dark, so well written, I loved it! I could not stop reading it, it flows so nicely, with such a powerful theme. I love revenge(<-I think there's an 'a' in there somewhere.) stories, amazing good, keep it up. =DD
-Dani
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Hey Dani,
Thank you so much for your kind & thoughful words, it is very much appreciated...
Have a great weekend...
Take care,
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not a problem, =DD
-Dani
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Simply amazing, I was pulled in from the start and wanted to read more. IT's dark and flows really well. Great work, spectacular! Keep writing.
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Awesome.. SImply superb! I am stoned, as... stone! Your description is out of this world... Fantastic imagery... I'll run out of superlatives at this rate...
"Yet despite the justice
of my dark fury,
I found I was unable to draw satisfaction
or solace from my brutal vengeance."- ooomph! bloody good! -
Wow...
Absolutely amazing.
This was fantastic! The story is just beautiful, and the way you put it in the poem... I wish I could do this!
Your wording is perfect, and the imagery? Amazing. It takes a true poet, and a true story writer to write something like this.
That's talent right here.
Wow. I am just... In awe. This is so beautiful, though sort of dark, it's in a good way.
Best of luck in the contests!
xoxo-♥-Tay
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Hey Tay,
Thank you so much for your kind & thoughtful words & clappies, it is very much appreciated...
Take care,
Fritz..........
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The imagery was wonderful. Its dark yet sweet, it has good flow. Thank you for entering and Good Luck.
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Freeky...
This is really dark, but amazing! Everything was described beautifully with loads of emotion. I like the end line, and the way that the charcter loved her. All the darkness stuff was really good, but the swear word spoilt the flow a little. Try using a different word.
Well done!
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