Goodbye

PROMPT(FREEWRITE): Here is your prompt, so to speak : I knew I was going to die. No one had to tell me the obvious, for I could see it. I was not going to see tomorrow, or my friends, or my house. Everything would all be gone. (My life would be gone.) My life is going to end.1

Now, I want you to come up with a basic character (person does not have to be named) and you basically have free-rein of the who, what, and everything about the person. Describe how they know their death is imminent and you can choose to write their actual death or not.2

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I knew I'd never see the deep blues that belonged to me on the angelic face of my baby girl again, the boy who I'd just seen born less than a month before, would never know me. They were going to grow up without a father. I hoped that when I was gone that those I worked with would do that same thing I did everyday. I hoped and prayed that they would catch the bastard standing before me, the bastard holding the smoking gun in his shaking hands. 4

When I was gone my buddies better go after him. I don't want my family knowing that the man who took me away from them was out there free. 5

My job was obviously done, I could do no more. I was cold, yet calm. Was I supposed to feel calm, knowing I would never see my angel or my boy grow up and live their lives? Was this natural? Maybe this meant it was time. There was the distant sound of sirens, I couldn't tell you if they were close by or not. There were voices, but I think they might be in my head. If the night had been dark before it was certainly dark now. Goodbye, Angel, goodbye baby boy, your father loves you. Goodbye.

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Thank you disturbed-dreamer for the awesome freewrite

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  • the shorty
    September 6, 2008

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    It's so sad. And I liked how you asked the question most people don't write about. Is it natural to be calm before death? Is there something else you should feel?
    Good job.


  • Adelaide Blood
    August 23, 2008

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    very well written

    i liked this it was a good read! ^^ it was pretty cool how you did this, you did a pretty awesome job with it