Flight 43

As the plane landed Dan watched her come off.  Her name is Allie, her name tag says Allie in big white letters with a black background.  She is the most beautiful women Dan had ever seen.  Dan watched her get on and off the same plane throughout the day.  She wore the same thing everyday, a little dark blue skirt with a white collared shirt and a dark blue jacket over that.  She was one of the flight attendants of plane 43.1

Dan has never talked to her, just watch her from afar.2

After being tried of just watching her, Dan went up to her and asked, “Would you like to go out sometime?”  “That is so sweet!” Allie said with a hugh smile across her face, “But I have someone at home waiting for me.” As soon as Allie said that Dan’s smile came off his face and he slowly walked away, looking at the ground.3

A few months later, Dan’s work has him go to a meeting in Florida. The plane he has to attend was flight 43.4

When he got onto the plane he say in his seat and seen Allie crying.  He went up to her and asked “Why are you crying?” Because he didn’t like to see people upset if he could a least try to help. Allie just sat there and didn’t say a word to him, or even give him a glance. So Dan went back to his seat feeling really embarrassed and a little upset. He feel asleep in his seat around one o’clock.5

He woke up to the sound of a flight attendants voice saying, “The plane has landed and you’re the only one left one it.” Her voice sounded sweet and gentle.6

When he got off, he went to the town hall, where is meeting was. He asked the big, rounded lady behind the counter, “Where can I find the meeting with Mr. Gray?” She Looked up at him with tiny eyes because of the fat rolls around her eyes, made them look smaller then they should be and said “ You didn’t hear? That meeting was cancelled. Sorry for all your trouble.” Dan was so frustrated and confused he didn’t know what to do.  So he decided just to go back home.7

When he go back to the airport, flight 43 was still there. But only the flight attendants where boarding it. Dan asked the old mad behind the counter, “Why are the flight attendants boarding plane 43?” The old man in a pink and green tie-dyed shirt, that was to small.  A roll a fat was between his shirt and his worn out blue jeans said “That plane is going home for the night.” 8

“Where is it going?” Asked Dan in a quick and airy voice. “Georgia.” the old man said as he looked at Dan with hugh glasses that made his eyes ten times bigger than normal. 9

Dan lived in Georgia his whole life, with his parents until one night Lori and Zach got into a car accident and was killed immediately, when Dan was only seventeen, now twenty-six he still lives in that same house.10

Dan walked out to the plane and asked “Can I get a ride back to Georgia?” 11

“Yes, I would like some company other than the people I work with all day!” Said a young teenage girl, that looked as if she only worked there a few weeks.12

During the flight Dan noticed, Allie was crying again. He wanted to ask her again why she was crying but he thought that would be rude, and he didn’t want to be embarrassed again. 13

Later on, Allie came over to him and sat down.  At first she just stared at the floor and didn’t say anything. Then all the sudden she looked up at him and said “I want to take that date now.”14

“Okay, I am going to take you to the most expensive restaurant.” Dan said is a exciting ways, as if he was going to jump put the window he was so excited.15

When they got back to Georgia, Dan took her to this beautiful restaurant.  Allie looked at it as if she never been to one like this before, except maybe a fast food place.  After they started to talk and joke around, they really started to like each other.  Allie never told Dan why she was crying that night on the plane.16

After a few months of seeing each other, one night when gabby was going to Dan’s for dinner. When she got there she looked really scared and the color was gone from her face. She was saying “He found me, he found me!” Over and over again.17

“Who found you?”  Asked Dan in a high pitched sqeck. “My ex-husband!”18

“You were married!”19

“Yes, but I divorced him a couple of weeks after we started dating.”20

“Why didn’t you tell me?”21

“I was ashamed of him, he always hit me, pushed me, and sometimes broke bones. And after I met you I knew that I deserved better than him. Allie hugged him really tight as if they were never going to see each other again.22

When she got home, she went inside and there stood eddy, Allie’s ex-husband.  He had a look on his face as if he was going to kill someone. “Why did you leave me?” Eddy yelled as he walked quickly up to Allie.  She didn’t say anything, she stood there staring at him with glazed over eyes. “Answer me!” He said as he came closer. “Now!”23

“I don’t love you anymore! You use to be really sweet and caring but now…..your not!”24

“What!” Eddy yelled, trying to sound as if he didn’t know.25

“I love someone else now!” As she backs away. Then out of now where he grabs her and pushes her out the door. “What are you doing?” Allie yelled. “I am taking you with me, where only I have see you and have you.” Eddy said in a soft, loving voice.26

“Let go of me!”27

“Stop moving!” Eddy yelled as he hit her across the face and pushes her down the stairs.  As she falls, she hits her head on a cement step and blacks out.28

The next thing Allie knew, she was waking up in an old cabin, that smelled of mold and dust.  Everything in the cabin was covered with dust as if is wasn’t used for years. Allie was tired to a chair, she tried to scream but duct tape covered her mouth.29

As Eddy walked in he said “I found that guy you claim to love. I told him to bring me what I asked for or I will kill you!” 30

At the moment Dan walked into the cabin carry a big cardboard box that had tape all around it.  Dan sat it on a three legged, moldy table that looked at if you set a penny on it, it was collapse. “You let her go right now!” Dan said is a serious voice.31

“Did you bring what I asked for?” Eddy said in a curious voice.32

“Yes, it is all here!”33

“Good, it better be.” Eddy said as he held a knife up and slit Allie’s throat. As she gasped for air, Dan tried to run to her but bumped into on old moldy table and a jar of dusty, gray marbles showered the floor. As Dan ran he slipped on then and fell onto a old fishing spear.  It stabbed him right through the back and out his chest.  As he lied  there trying to breathe he said “Allie!” In an airy voice. He face lost color and he died and did Allie.34

Eddy walked over to the only moldy table that held the box, Dan brought and picked it up. As he did, he thought you himself this is really light…..to light! With a confused look on his face he opened the box, and there was nothing inside.35

As he threw the box across the room he stormed out and he was never seen or heard from again!36

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  • Squiem
    March 23, 2005
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    Thanks..i am glad you liked it...I know i put the ending like that because most stories like that end in a good way and i thought i'd make a change...thanks agian for the comment..i enjoy them!


  • MYownFreedom
    March 23, 2005
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    great write

    oh wow...what a tragic story.....to start out so lovely about a man adoring a women....to the demise of both the man and women..would have never expected the ending to end the way that it did. Item of surprise, great elemenet to add to your story.You really captured my attention through the whole write.Great write! -Amy

  • Squiem
    March 7, 2005
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    I am glad you liked it..i know there is alot of errors in there..i found them after i read through it..but i think people will get it though so its all good..lol! thanks for the comment..i really enjoy reading them..thanks for the appluad to...


  • Cyber Artist Moderators member
    March 7, 2005
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    I can see Mr kings influence all over this, Its really quite good just a few minor grammatical errors but we all make those, and the more you write the less they become or that’s what I tell myself. Perhaps you just pick them up easer or something. I like that you are double teaming this should give you double the ideas and makes for instant criticism all up a well worth read keep it up

  • Squiem
    March 6, 2005
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    Thanks..i am glad you liked it..But your a way better writer than i am..i am jealous of your talent for writing!!


  • thewriterwithin
    March 6, 2005
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    WOw, this was a really great story!!! I loved it.. omg when I read this sentence:

    Eddy said as he held a knife up and slit Allie’s throat.

    I gasped out loud. Haha That's the kind of effect that's great to have on the reader. I loved this and I think it was well thought out. Great ending to the story as well. Keep writing <3

    Take Care,
    !*-Jasmine-*!

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