Green

Wind drove the emerald leaves into a frenzy. Each of them hiding a dark secret. They spoke to each other of the coming days when their lovely multiple shades of green would be fading. They mumbled and complained of losing their luster. Their shining brilliance would fade and the reds, oranges and then brown, which signals death, would over take them.1

An olive lizard pranced along tickling them. For just a moment, their troubles forgotten, the glow of jade returned to their faces. The elders scolded the youngsters as they knew as time passed all must fall to the grass. 2

Author notes

Written for a “drabble” (100 words exactly) contest. Inspired by a summer or color contest (don't remember which) I couldn’t enter.

for contest; Time for the shorts by emily cullen
lolt
I think it would fall under the "autumn" option don't you?

for contest; So colorfull! by SuperBethany
if you can't tell my favorite color is green.

for contest; What'll we have? [Options contest] by Holey Pastry
option 8 inanimate object pov

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  • felanor
    July 9

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    Beautifully done, especially with having a 100-word limit for the original contest it was written for. I give you props for not using the same shade of green more than once in your story!

    Thanks for entering.


  • Holey Pastry
    June 9

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    That was really well written. Though short it told a story, I really liked it.

    Aw...sad day...no smiley face...

    Thanks for entering! Best of luck

    <3 H.P.


  • Nickelspring
    February 21

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    I love "drabble" because they are so short that every word is essential to the overall piece. I think you have done a lovely (and colorful!!) job on this.
    KW~


  • Bethany
    February 18

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    I like it =] Very green =] And it's okay if its under the word limit, i just want people to make an effort in what they submit instead of just entering so they can get a few points...
    good job =]


  • DogsLookUp silver member
    January 17

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    Wow this is so beautiul and poetic I love how you portrayed green as the lush, vibrant color of life and when the leaves fade to brown they wither and die just like we humans do...a stunningly gorgeous write.

    Ink


  • Silver Dancer silver member
    January 15
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    thank you for putting that in there and thank you for entering my contest

  • Silver Dancer silver member
    January 15

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    very well written i love this story well poem or short story i think that this is wonder full but you forgot to put in lolt in your authors notes but you have shown that you read the rules so i will give you 3-4 hours to put lolt in your authors notes ok


  • lavanya
    December 24, 2008

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    what beautiful discription of leaves....this little piece is very detaied and you did amazing job to cover almost every green thing in gardon . simply excellent.


  • MidniteRockers
    November 15, 2008

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    After reading this short story, I'm thinking of green in a completely different way. I love all the description and how it was set out. I'm very impressed.
    Good luck
    Lollyx

  • jmcherrygirl15
    November 14, 2008
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    It is a rather nice narrative. It was nicely described, but it ended very abruptly. I have to be honest: I really wasn't pleased with the length. I know I didn't specify a word minimum, and I'm very sorry for not being clear. But I feel like the story was left open-ended, and I really would like to read more.


    • tonialoise
      November 14, 2008
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      Ah, well that's because it was a drabble (exactly 100 words). Not a problem if you want to DQ it go ahead.


  • Thorn-on-the-Rose
    September 23, 2008

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    I like ur descriptions, they're very realistic, it's very nice =DD keep up the good work =DDD Good job =DD

    -Dani


  • Fritz O skennick
    September 11, 2008

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    Great stuff...

    Fun personification that made me smile...
    And so much conveyed in so few words...
    Keep up the good work...
    Well done!!!


  • tallblondie gold member
    August 23, 2008

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    I loved the personification of the leaves, as well as the amazing use of descriptive language - in particular the array of colours.

    Thank you for your entry and good luck.


  • juhi
    August 23, 2008
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    Elegent discription and elegent green . *clap*


  • angelaononchan
    August 23, 2008
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    oh yeah. it is green.

  • angelaononchan
    August 23, 2008

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    my favorite colour is blue. I like your description. is your colour green? why there is a jade colour. green leaves can show up so much?

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