Sara collapsed onto her bed, shrugging off her blazer onto the floor. Another day of school passed. The same old stares. The same old whispering behind hands. The same old reactions from her “friends”…1
She sat up, and looked around her room. She spotted her hoodie and jeans lying on the floor from where she had left them last night. Sara picked them up, and changed into them, quickly pulling down the sleeves over her arms. But she wasn’t quick enough. She saw them. Her scars.2
She knew what was coming next, and she hated it. She closed her eyes and gritted her teeth. 3
“Hello Sara” said voices in the back of her head4
SHUTUP she yelled, opening her eyes, and slamming a CD into the CD player beside her. She turned H.I.M up to full volume, but she couldn’t drown out them out. More of them awoke, hissing at her5
“You think you can ignore us with you precious music? Ha!”6
“You’re weak Sara”7
“You’re pathetic. You don’t deserve to live!”8
SHUTUPSHUTUPSHUTUP Sara yelled, putting her fingers in her ears, and shrinking down into a ball. GO AWAY! LEAVE ME ALONE!9
“Aww look!” itsy bitsy Sara is crying!”10
“How pathetic”11
“What a baby!”12
LEAVE ME ALONE! I HATE YOU! FUCK OFF! She yelled, rocked backwards and forwards on her knees, tears streaming down her face.13
“Make us”14
Don’t taunt me, Sara muttered. GO AWAY15
“But it’s so much fun!”16
“you give us so much energy, all your shouting”17
“we feed from you, you give us life”18
“we’ll never leave you, cause we are a part of you…forever”19
NO! I’ll….I’ll…. Sara said desperately, opening her eyes wide, fingers still in her ears, looking frantically around.20
“You’ll what, baby Sara?”21
“Cut? Blah! That won’t get rid of us, as you know well!”22
“We only go away for a while”23
“We would never desert you Sara…”24
“we’ll come back to haunt you”25
Sara took her fingers out of her ears and searched in a draw of her desk, pulling out a razor. 26
“Go on then Sara”27
“Yeah go on then. Cut. Bleed!”28
“We’ll be back”29
No you wont she thought, sliding the blade across her wrist, and felt the voices fade away with the blood.30
She sat their, savouring the peace of her mind. The voices controlled her…she hated them…and they would come back.31
She couldn’t bear it. She had taken their taunts, their abuse, and their orders all her life. 32
She walked to the bathroom, and got down all the pills from the shelf. 33
Slipping the last pill into her mouth, things started to go blurry. She lay down on her bed, feeling…tired…34
But she had won. She had beaten the voices…she had killed them…at the cost of her own life.35
She smiled. At last she would have peace. Her last thoughts were how she would never hear their taunts again. Then she slipped away.36
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great
amazing. i really relate to this piece cos i'm just like Sara.
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this is an amazing story, i jst wish that one of Sara's actual, close friends that is always there for her, got to her first, Sara should of talked to them instead of the voices as Sara would probably mean more than the world to them -XxoxX-
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OH MY GOD! my favorite piece. my absolute favorite. this is my sister, and her name is sara too. she has bi polar and she also has voices, well so she says. but she has beaten then with being stronger and everything. i love this poem. i really do keep it up! i love your work!
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I am gonna comment again..cos if you are like this...I feel guilty.... It is really amazing...If you want other voices..imagine a hopeful one...mine, I say *Mina, hamster song, and my soul is with you. If you feel pain I feel it to* okay!!!!!!! Frickin hell I am worried for some reason..I feel really weird at moment...anyway... I mean it...I will fight the voices if I can!!!1 I'll try!!!!
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This was soooo good!! Loved it!
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wow, thats all I can say! this is amazing, well done! keep writing! xxx charlie : )
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wow this is awesome, very powerful. wicked write, keep it up sweetie
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Really good honney....u a really good writter... i can realte to it a lot, a lot of feeling in it too....please keep on writting, you are one of my favourite writters...!
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this is really good i love this it made me want to read on till the end. really love it. well done
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this is brilliant, i can't beleive how youve managed to fit so much emotion, so much insight, into so few words....
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wow!!!!!! this is really good....iu love the idea of those voices in the back of her head.....really clever and creative
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Amazing!!!!!!!! I didnt know you were so talented at stories!!!!!! Astounding......
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You go girl.
That is absolutly incredible and I know th at you know it. You freaking KICK ASS Mina!!!
Don't ever stop writing!!!!
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oh my god!!
this was just AMAZING!!!!!! i like how you said "No you wont she thought, sliding the blade across her wrist, and felt the voices fade away with the blood." <<--that was awesome. there was sooo much talent in this. God! you rock!!!! 
i wish i could write somethign awesome like this. lol. keep it up SXC!! 
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wow, this is amazing sweetheart! i get that feeling if i don't cut, that nagging feeling in the back of my throat and in a way i guess they ARE voices but yeah. great job sweetie it's a beautiful story.
Love always,
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Wow. Very powerful write hun Thats seriously amazing.. So honest and sad.. It's beautiful in a dark way, I love it
Keep it up and take care
- C xxxx
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very dark, and very sad. I like how you incorporated cutting and suicide, but you didn't do the obvious thing , you made her do something different, like making her stuff down the pills instead of her slitting wrist. very clever.
Bella -
i love this. usually when voices taunt me i cant shout at then cos they zap my energy but this story is perfectly true in every other aspect. well done "applause"
ur an awesome writer.
keep it up and be strong.
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hey this is awesome sad... but still awesome sad is good, but yeah i love it, if this is just some of ur stuff then wow i can't imagine wat the rest would b like....they would b awesome but neways i'll catchya aye, see ya round, keep writin it's awesome
catchya
Josh
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