What was he doing?1
I wanted to either a) run up to him and scream "WHAT ARE YOU DOING?" or embrace him and never let go. I chose neither. I got out of the car and walked into the school, and to my unreasonable delight, he followed me, amusement playing across his perfect face. All of a sudden, I felt a slightly frigid presence by my ear. "It has been a very long time since I have done this, and I am quite sure that it has changed a lot. Would you be so kind and help me?" His words didn't make sense, but I felt the oddest compulsion to do everything he told me to do. "Of course." 2
I walked to the table with the schedules and found my name. He smiled in understanding and walked to his name. Catching a glimpse of his schedule, I saw that his name was Storm. Math was his first subjest. And my first subject. My heart palpatated. 3
"Shall we?" he asked. And we walked to math.
Author notes
I know it's short and you guys waited a while, but here it is.
Comments
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haha.
*waits for the next chapter*
brillaintly done.
cheers
Hunter`
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I really enjoyed these three chapters. I also read your exposition to this, which I thought was interesting though I don't think it really fits with the rest. Anyway, I'm getting off topic, once again. I thought, apart from a few cliche characteristics and just a handful of typos, that this piece was very well written with vibrant words. I don't really know your writing style very well so I can't tell you to add more of anything else. This just may be the way you want it to be written, and if so, good because this is pretty much awesome. I do hate that this one was so short.
Completely blanked out. I just forgot the main character's name... If you ever even mentioned it... Anyway, I'd love to get some more background information about him. Like his age, just things that could give the reader a little better perception of the character that is being followed. Anyway, good job here. And keep writing! -
sweet more please.
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