Hurt

I feel so hurt1

Words cannot express it2

I also feel rage and tears stinging my eyes3

You lied to me4

You said you would be my friend5

But all you do is ignore me6

Day in and day out7

I cannot take it anymore8

You make me hurt more than anyone else I know9

My life stands in ruins as I cry and cry10

I need you but you do not need me11

I guess I will give up on you12

forever13

and ever14

and ever

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  • Sgs gold member
    September 26

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    Very emo, I hope you do not give up on anyone forever and ever and ever, though. This expresses feelings very well, good job!


  • Quixotic Greeters member
    September 24

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    This is so sad! Perhaps you should just say forget it and smile instead.? who knows. Totally depressing though so thanks for entering it!


  • Bello.Midnight
    September 23

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    This was sad...
    it fueled hatred yet more so sorrow..
    more so because you felt broken and that saddens me....
    Blake ♣


  • supremeheavenlord
    August 31
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    bam

    i hate your guts


    • CrazySouthernGirl
      September 5
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      and btw, this story that you commented on is not about you, it's about Jack. So, no, you didn't hurt me, to tell the truth, I think I hurt you more. I am really sorry about everything that happened and hopefully you will find a new girlfriend who cares about u just as much as I did. ( and I did love you very much and still do) OMG, I am crying like crazy right now. Whenever you get online, if you ever get on again, hopefully you will see this message. I am so sorry Brad.

      ~Lil~


    • CrazySouthernGirl
      September 4
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      I am really sorry Brad, I wrote you a story and I want you to read it. ( it's on my page and it's called I am Sorry)


  • scriptor
    August 29

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    i think that sometimes, when people hurt one another, they dont even realize it, and i think thats the case alot of the time. i like the way you ended it with the last 3 lines


  • RemainingWarrior
    August 26
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    giving up isnt always the option in life. very well written poem.


  • Kirin
    August 22

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    poor you... very emotional... very nice.. keep writing..
    in p9 isn't it 'you hurt me more' or 'you make me feel hurt' or is it only me?


  • NinjaMegami
    August 21
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    cool

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