Where the difference lies cannot be in what we are, for what we are is human…. All of us are human, nothing more and nothing less. Perhaps some have flaws, such as the inability to see, to hear, to touch, to move, but we all have the ability to love… Just as we all have the ability to hate… We are divided, not by what we are, but by what we have made us. When hate is so common, and love so hard to find, what more can we do, than feel so alone on this overpopulated planet of beings of likeness? Maybe this is hard to understand, maybe I am hard to understand, or maybe I’m not so confusing… I can’t be confusing, because I, like you, are human, and made up of the same things as you, and so I am every bit as confusing as you, in theory… Right?2
Why can I not pick out the difference between us? Is it for my flaws and weaknesses or for my perfections and strengths? I said that wrong… Not my perfections, I am not perfect, as no one is… Or maybe I am… Yes, I am perfect… I am the perfect me, which means you are the perfect you, and we are the perfect we. Can you understand this? Of course you can, because I can, and we are the same… Why do you seem like you don’t follow what I say? Could my theory be wrong… are we in fact very different?3
You have the same two eyes as me, but there... there I can see a difference… Mine are but blue, and yours are hazel… Could that be the difference? Is the color of our eyes the reason we both feel love and hate? I can’t see how something so small can result in such things, but maybe if they can result in such things they really aren’t that small after all… But we still are the same, I think… We still have a nose, lips, ears, and hair… Hair… Is that the difference between us all? Yours is red, mine is blonde… Can that be the reason our thoughts and feelings are so far apart? Do you think it’s at all possible for something like the color of your hair to result in bitterness between us for such a thing so small? 4
We are but the same though…. We will always be the same beings, we cannot change that… Look there, that man is the same as me and you! He is a human, with a mind, a heart, and the power to love and to hate and he is not different either! But, he is of a darker skin color… Does that make him different? Can he feel emotions I cannot for the fact of his skin being of such color? Should I find hate within me for this man, because he is of another skin tone? But then does that not mean he can hate me? Is it really me who is different? Is it my skin that is just paler than everyone else? No I am the same, too… I still have a heart; I can feel its steady beat… The color of my skin cannot be the difference… It can’t be why we are so hateful, because not one of us has the exact same skin, and if we hated everyone with another tone of skin color, than we’d have no one left to love… On the inside we are all the same, and it is what’s on the inside that keeps us alive, the inner parts of us create our emotions and out thoughts...5
I still don’t understand… I don’t understand this emotion of love; I don’t understand this motion of hate! Why can I not make sense of this world? We are the same, and that is the bottom line, but then why are we so divided? We all rely on the same things to live, we all we created the same way, no matter what we may believe created us, we have no way to prove a theory, so it matters not who thinks what created us as long as we care the simply understanding that whatever did happen to create us created us all the same way… Diversity, pain, lies, hatred… I can’t begin to understand it, despite my desperate attempts to make sense of it all… We are not different… We are the same… We are the same...
Author notes
Alright, this was written as more of a rant, but it is definately a story as well. It obviously has philosophy to it, the theory that we are the same and can understand each other, all feel love and hate, and live in the world together. It is really hard to break down, and I guess the philosophy behind it is really what you get out of it. I do hope you get something out of it after all ^^
Also, I did read one of your stories as well as leave a comment ^^ I think if I gave you a title it would give away who I am and with this being an anonymous contest and all, you know... ^^ You're a good writer though!
A contest entry
- Make Me Think by ElfSong.
700 points, ended September 10, 19 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
honesty?
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Thank you for entering my contest. Something like that is what I have been hoping for. It is an excellent idea that you have portrayed in this piece.
I didn't feel that it was that well stuctured though. I'd suggest you write out each of your points for believing what you do, and then write a paragraph for each. All, of course, in a logical order. Although it was written as a rant, it still merits proper chronology.
Apart from that, here are some minor ideas; sorry for being so picky:
Parahgraph 1: Do we rely on the moon?
Paragraph 2: "...by what we have made us." Doesn't sound quite right...
"...love so hard to find" there is a lot of supposed 'love' in the world, perhaps 'true love' is hard to find.
Paragraph 3 seems to be a repeat of paragraph 2. you are beginning to get a bit 'ranty'.
Last paragraph: "...we all we..." confusing...
"We all rely on the same things to live, we all we created the same way, no matter what we may believe created us, we have no way to prove a theory, so it matters not who thinks what created us as long as we care the simply understanding that whatever did happen to create us created us all the same way… " too long.
You also use "..." too much. I am a fan of using the dots, but 10 sets in every paragraph can be a little too much.
Overall, I really liked the thought you put into this piece, and with a little structuring, it could be really good. Well done. -
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You are wrong... We do rely on the moon, with out it we would die. The moon is the reason we have tides and winds, it is a gravitational pull, that makes us spin, even as we revolve around the sun. Without it, we are stuck at a stand still, with it being a blazing hot summer in one half of the earth and a bitter cold winter on the other, not to mention the sun would suck us in closer and kill us... (Astronomy and astrology are topics I am really into) Bottom line is, yes we rely on the moon. ^^
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i never thought about the irony of feeling alone on a planet of billions of people. I got what you were trying to say but i must admit that it was a bit tedious reading a paragraph stretched into 6.
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Exactly. Very well put. We're all human. There's nothing else to say. Just because we look different or have a different background gives no reason for hatred. Thank you for writing this and thank you for making me think on a day where I didn't have much to think about.

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P2: Not sure if the inabilities listed are necessarily flaws...
Other then that this is really great! Powerful and moving. You really put some thought into this. If you were to expand this into a longer piece, I sense this would be a diary entry? Or something of that sort.
Good luck in your contest.




