Little boy, so innocent so sweet.1
Your eyes are like the blue waters of the sea2
Water that reflects all the love you have like the sun3
And though you're still ever so young4
The happiness they show spans a lifetime.5
Little boy, so playful so full of mischief.6
Your hands are like branches of a tree7
Always grabbing for the wind able to bring music from it with the rustling.8
Ever creating, ever building9
Gently grasping my hand leading the way.10
Little boy, so bright so smart11
Your tiny mouth so full of teeth that never bite indiscriminately12
It is your envoy for what is on your mind13
Some words not so sweet, but never false in their meaning14
Some words stronger, the ones you first learned, more loving still.15
Little boy, so wonderful, so cute16
Your heart is bigger than any will know17
It holds all those things you keep dear18
Mother, Father, friends and family19
It is good to see that there is still room for me20
your little sibling to be.
Author notes
This is one of the first poems I ever wrote. I wrote it for second nephew from his older brother's pov.
for Alyana's poetry contest;
user name tonialoise
what I would do with a random bannana? But what about ordinary bananan's? Is this some sort of trick question? I'd eat it. I think. Unless random banana's can't be eaten. I'd have to peel it first... and... ok I don't know I'm just rambling now.
for contest;Storywrite's Choice by HowDoYouSayLove
category; OVERALL poems
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wonderful that was just greath thank you for submiting
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Hey you are getting better i poems too, this one is another good poem . espacially when it is POV of lil boy ...one your best ....keeep writitng dear ..you are would be best seller auther...good luck.
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glad you liked it
though it's an old poem.
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this is so cute, and really good. It's interesting hearing it from that perspective, but i liked it!
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very sweet, cute, this little boy has a wonderful aunt.
however, i was a little confused at the beginning because your first 4 lines rhyme but none other than the last two do that I noticed. just let me know if this is intentional. other than that, great!
good job!
snaps and good luck!
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yep that was intentional. Most of my poems are free verse, especially my older ones like this one.
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kay good, just makin sure :]
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This is really sweet. A lovely poem, and I wonder if the child will one day read it. Depending on how old he is when he DOES read it, he will probably say he's embarrased and roll his eyes- but secretly, I bet he'd be touched. I like how you used rhyme throughout the poem at times, but didn't let your poem be a slave to it, and the rhyme was well done and not forced. I really enjoyed this. Good luck in the contest.
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don't know why I haven't replied to you earlier. actually I'm not sure he ever did read it. I know I sent it to my sister some time ago. The older one is in highschool now so I should see what he thinks of it.
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awww, so cute.
I have a nephew, he's 3 months old.
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