This story contains many characters includeing a beautiful girl named Nizemo who has a very sad background. (i made her up)1
Nizemo's childhood: When Nizemo was a young child she was ridiculed because her parents were criminals and she lived with her grandmother. Nizemo had to make her own clothes because her grandmother hadn't the money to buy them for her.
Nizemo is currently 8 yrs old at this time.
Tamura: Nizemo honey?2
Nizemo: Yes grandma?3
Tamura: Can you go to town today and do a few things for me?4
Nizemo: Yes grandma.5
Tamura: Good! Here's the list of things that I need you to do for me.6
Nizemo: Ok grandma I'll be back later!7
Nizemo then thinks to herself : (OK so the first thing i need to do is pick up the groceries)8
MEANWHILE9
Tamura: Nizemo is such a sweet girl...she'll make a fine wife someday *knock knock knock* Coming!
*opens door* hello deary is there something I can do for,..ah!10
And there, standing in the doorway was a tall dark figure holding a knife that was currently being stabbed into the old lady's stomach...11
Tamura: Nizemo...I'm...so sor..ry..unhh..that i couldn't take better..care of you.....12
Dark Figure: Sorry, granny. But a little birdie told me you had some valuable stuff stashed here.13
Tamura: But..I'm ju-st a lowley...pesent(if that's how u spell it)14
Dark Figure: *then steps into the light*15
who is the dark figure? find out on the next chapter!
Do you like it so far?
Comments
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ok soo
you said there were a few errors? like what?
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It's a good start.....


