CHAPTER ONE::: allpoetry.com/Story/638381 1
Her body was quivering. She had been eating three courses of fingernails every day for a week. The town was silent except for her nervous shifting across the town square toward the garbage heap. 2
Her straggly locks of auburn hair swayed gently upon her boney upper chest. She wiped the memory of last night's tears out from the corner of her searching green eyes and dried her fingers off on her tattered brown cloak. 3
She approached the edge of a putrid pile of rotting feces and other maggoty delights. She rubbed her hands together a few times and then bit her bottom lip just before diving straight into the middle of the monstrosity. She retrieved what looked like a spongy clump of oats and hungrily stuffed them down the back of her throat. She swiftly swallowed her prize and then reluctantly began to digest her aspirations of one day becoming held in higher regard than a rabid sewer rat. Her name was Lula. 4
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Author notes
——Updated: 3/4/05
——The setting is a fantasy world reminiscent of medievil times (but is really a whole lot more complicated). The characters are inspiried by a deck of playing cards (hence the forshadowous pun in the title).
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I'm waiting anxious to see how YOU see this Lula!The begining left me speechless(but with my mouth shut
) I wish you....TIME,to work more on the novel! 
beginning: 5.
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I just skipped over to my newer novela "Trip and Stumble" for a few days... and the crazy thing is I actually finished that one!!! ( http://storywrite.com/story/show/48079 ) This one will too reach its end one day. But I most likely won't have time to get back to it until work slows down again.
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It's still coming out of me.... just very slowly. I update every time I get a chance to but I work full time and like to keep up with my poetry too so it's not quite progressing at an ideal pace yet. Thanks for reading through it, I like the ideas I throw into it too (and the ones I still have cooking up inside me for the rest of the plot)
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are you still working on this? i really hope you are because ive read both parts and they are amazing, you have a very unique idea for this obviously and your descriptions are full of detail and are just wonderful...i really hope ur still planning to continue this because i need to know the plot of this story, it sounds REALLY intriguing...great write, honestly it's one of my absolute favorite stories on allpo and if you publish this book someday i will be the first to buy a copy and it'll probably become my favorite book too..lol sry i sound obsessed but the idea for this story sounds awesome!!
ok well byez!
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Wow... Gimme more! Your choice of words (for detail) is so perfect. And some of those phrases...
She had been eating three courses of fingernails every day for a week.
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ewwww gross beginning...but want to read more please
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