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Trial Testimony - Dr. L. P. Donaldson2
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Abused children often lose touch with reality, and develop personality disorders such as manic depression, schizoid personalities, or multiple personality syndrome. In extreme circumstances they can become completely disconnected from their emotions, these people are known as 'sociopaths'. Now, children with these disorders are not necessarily dangerous, and quite often cause no problems at all. But when you have several of these children, in a group, then you've got a ticking time bomb on your hands. 4
Excerpt - Report by Sergeant Emilio Montez5
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Victim identified as Robert Johannsen by spouse ( Barb Johannsen ) Body was found in North-West corner of kitchen by Mrs. Johannsen at approximately 6:30 pm, today ( March 7th, 2004 ). Paramedics pronounced the victim dead on arrival. Victim appears to have been bludgeoned around the head and face. Victim has also been stabbed approximately 20 - 30 times, in torso and neck area. Coroner places time of death as approximately 3:30 - 4:00 pm, today. Tentative cause of death: Massive blood loss from wounds. Body has been sent to Medical Examiner for autopsy.7
Mrs. Johannsen states that their son, Bobby Johannsen ( age 10 ) is missing. No evidence at scene to indicate the whereabouts of the child. Missing persons report has been filed.8
Police Interrogation - Samantha McNeil9
Bobby didn't show up at the clubhouse again, so a bunch of us decided to go to his house after school to check on him. We knew his dad had been drinking a lot lately, so we were worried.10
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Trial Testimony - Joshua Schwartz12
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When we saw him hitting him, Bobby I mean, we just, I don't know, we just all...I don't know.14
You don't know?15
We just snapped, I guess. He was hitting him, and Bobby was crying, and...Samantha grabbed a knife...and I had my baseball bat...16
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Excerpt - Report by Sergeant Emilio Montez18
Items taken into evidence:19
1 wooden baseball bat20
4 kitchen knives ( various sizes )21
7 latent print lifts ( from back door into kitchen, on and around doorknob )22
Sent to lab for further analysis23
Police Interrogation - Samantha McNeil24
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We hadn't planned it at all. After what happened at Bobby's house, it was like we suddenly knew what we had to do. We had this power, you know?26
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Collier Daily Herald28
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15 PEOPLE FOUND DEAD, CHILDREN MISSING30
A maniac is on the loose, according to police. On March 7th and 8th, 15 people were brutally murdered in their homes, and their children apparently abducted. Sergeant Emilio Montez ( lead detective )...31
Trial Testimony - Michela Leeds32
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So, after you left the Johannsen's house, you all went back to Samantha's clubhouse?34
Yeah...yes, sir.35
And what did you talk about there?36
How we had to get out of town before somebody found, you know, found the body. Then Sam started talking about her dad, and, like, what he used to do to her, you know? That's when we started thinking maybe we could, you know, do it again.37
Press Release - Lieutenant Daniel Bartoy, Collier Police Department38
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...have now officially classified these murders as serial killings. We are working with the F.B.I. to form a task force devoted to solving this case. We are still trying to find the children of the victims. If anyone has any information, we urge you...40
Trial Testimony - Kaitlin Murdock41
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How did you end up in Rose Valley?43
Well, we decided we had to keep moving, because everyone was looking for us.44
And what happened in Rose Valley?45
We realized there were a lot more kids like us, more than we thought, and Samantha said we ought to help them too...46
Rose Valley Tribune47
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COLLIER KILLER IN ROSE VALLEY?49
Last night a man and his wife ( names not yet released ) were found dead in their home. Their 13 year old son has been reported missing by relatives. Police refused to discuss the similarities between...50
Excerpt - Report by Sergeant Maxwell Brown51
Victims were declared dead on arrival. Coroner places time of death around 12:00pm to 2:00pm, today ( March 13th ) for both victims. Male victim has 10-15 stab wounds to the torso and face area. Tentative cause of death: blood loss from wounds. Female victim has abrasions around throat and neck area.Tentative cause of death: strangulation. Bodies sent to M.E. for autopsies.52
Police Interrogation - Samantha McNeil53
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Well, it wasn't like we could just walk by and not do anything. Once we started we couldn't just stop, it was like our duty now.55
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Rose Valley Tribune57
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WHERE ARE THE CHILDREN?59
...neighbor claims to have witnessed a large group of children exiting the victim's house around 2:00pm on March 13th, just 4 hours before the bodies were discovered. "I recognized Damon, of course, but I'd never seen any of the others before...60
Trial Testimony - Damon Whitaker61
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I didn't think they would really do it, but then that girl, Samantha, pulled a screwdriver out of her pocket...63
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Excerpt - Report by Sergeant Maxwell Brown65
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Items taken into evidence:67
1 screwdriver68
1 belt ( child's size )69
1 knife blade ( broken, no handle )70
4 print lifts ( front door of house, doorknob ) 71
3 print lifts ( master bedroom door, doorknob ) 72
Submitted to lab for analysis73
Channel 10 News74
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...a rash of murders across the state. Police have now linked murders in seven cities to the 'Collier Killer'. The crime spree began on March 7th with the killing of Robert Johannsen of Collier. Authorities say...76
Police Interrogation - Samantha McNeil77
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We started to feel like we'd never get caught. We felt like super heroes or something...protecting the innocent and all that, you know?79
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Collier Daily Herald81
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FINGERPRINTS AT SCENES MATCH MISSING CHILDREN'S83
In a shocking new development, the 'Collier Killer' task force has announced that evidence suggests...84
Press Release - Agent Kimberly Blackwell, Federal Bureau of Investigation85
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...believe they were responsible for 89 murders in all, we are still investigating several other cases. We currently have 46 children in custody, and have begun questioning...87
Police Interrogation - Samantha McNeil88
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...we almost got away, you know that? I could have, at least, if that pig hadn't shot me in the leg...90
Trial Testimony - Dr. L. P. Donaldson91
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...usually in these groups, there is an unofficial leader of sorts. One person that the other, weaker members respect, sometimes almost worship. And that leader often serves as the driving force, if you will. They may convince their followers to do things they would otherwise never...93
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Closing Arguments - Prosecuting Attorney Jackson Rutledge95
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...and I submit to you that Samantha McNeil, while only 13 years old, was fully aware of the criminality, the seriousness, of her actions...and while there were many others involved, she was the instigator, and therefore she must be held responsible... 97
Author notes
"The good are fables, little lies people tell themselves so they can get through their days without screaming too much."
Commented on "Lady Shiva" by CelticSkyz (great story by the way)
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JUST SO AWSOME IT IS SCARY
This is so awsome I absolutely love it you know this would make the best horror MOVIE you know kind of like "Texas Chainsaw Massacre" or something and you would be fantastic as a person who files things in a place for courts I mean this was so........professional. Words cannot describe how this made me feel...it was scary, spine-tingling, weird, startling, outrageous (in a cool way), and yet very chilling. I think you truly deserved the gold in the contest it is the best thing I have seen so far. Yet again you amaze me Tumbleweed
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wow. this was awesome. this was indeed very scary, and the sad thing is it's very plausible. very plausible indeed. it reminded me of children of the corn only much, much better of course. thanks for your great entry, good luck in the contest!
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*Twitch*. It does seem real, y'know? Terrific format, thanks for creeping me out. Great job, I love these scary stories.
Proof that you should never abuse a child.
~Ninq
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Dude, this does seem real. It's really good, interesting, and held my attention. I love the style, too. Great job.
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Excellent
Very interesting and I love the style! Do you write novels? I wish it went on further, but for a contest entry I guess if you went on it would have been too long. -
I'm very impressed, beyond words really. This didn't have the bone-chilling effect on me, but I think that's mainly because of my detachment from the scenario. This is really an excellent write and frankly, I'm a bit disappointed that you entered the contest for now I fear that I do not stand a chance. A shame for me, but really, this is almost too good not to win, the unique style, perspective, personable factors, they all add up to one remarkable read. Excellent.
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mad excellent
This was an excellent story. I loved how things started "speeding up" the further you got to the conclusion. I wish that I could do something like this... It must have required quite a bit of research to get the format of the police reports, court records, and depositions. Very excellent overall. -
amazing!! seriously... the format was incredible and very creative, the storyline itself is well thought out... great job!!
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I'm so glad you liked it My theory is that the scariest stories are the ones that seem like they could actually happen. Are you going to post your story here, when you're done? If so, I'll keep an eye out for it
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AMAZING
this was amazing...it's actually scary because it does seem somewhat real. a friend of mine and i are working on a story sort of like this but the kids don't go on a huge killing spree. this was wonderfully written!! i love how you keep switching back from the testimony to the press release and everything. this is truly an amazing piece! thanks for entering and good luck!
sweet screams
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Excellent documentation.
As the wife of a retired Virgina law enforcement officer he is indeed documenting incidents of child abuse. You do this in a documentation form which the author has done really well. I did a complete novel about this same subject and called it The Dance and I have to go back over and do some editing and send to a publisher. I like the style of how this is written and it reminds me of Dennis Griffin a retired New York state investigator. I commend you on this write. So much so that I an giving points to promote this. My husband major in criminal law was child abuse. This is a subject that needs more attention drawn to it. -
two thumbs up!
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SHYT
my mouth just made the perfect freaking "O"!!!!!!!!!! damnnnn ur better at writing stories than i am and thats the truth but who knows i might do another story one day but this time ill have it written down in a notebook before i post it but with me u never really know; perhaps a collaboration story one day?? -
No, these aren't real, LOL. All products of my twisted imagination
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Gory
This is a really great piece of work! I can't believe this story to be honest. It seems so gruesome and yet so real. The kids just couldn't take it anymore. True justice never seems right, I would know, I punched my stepdad in the face once.. after he had been beating on me and throwing me into the wall. And guess who got in trouble. Anyways I loved this and I wish you all the best.
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GREAT READ
What are you describing here? Are these real scenes of real murders? a very spooky write here, but well written, keep on writing.
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This stroy was orginal and a really good write. I haven't heard anything like it. It persents a new meaning and adds intensity to things like abuse, revenge, and the morals of right and wrong.
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oh, crap, I didn't even notice that LOL. Thanks so much!
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Hey
This was interesting, If I could suggest on thing is to space out this part (because of smilies and such.)
4 print lifts (front door of house, doorknob )
3 print lifts (master bedroom door, doorknob )
either space out the b and the ) or itll be something like
smiling at the reader which isnt what you mean I think. But other than that I didnt see any other mistakes.
Mal
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I'm speachless.... that is actuallt really upsetting.... T_T
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