How many more people have to die in my family before we can live in peace? How many more people have to die in my family before we can live with out pain? I seem to ask this everyday...12
My names Alison Strife, its Teutonic for Sacred Flame. I am a sixteen year old girl, but turning seventeen on Christmas. My family's past as been a very weird one, all of the females have died on their seventeenth birthday, so they end up with a good guy who understands their beliefs and have a kid at the age of sixteen, but not me. 34
I don't believe in that, but I am scared of dieing at such a young age since my birthday's in three weeks. Maybe it scares me more of dieing alone, with no one there to hold my hand and tell me its OK. Oh yeah the females in my family that die, end up dieing violently. My mother died by being shot twice. Once in the chest and a second in the leg.56
My father was there to hold her hand since they were spending the day together while they could. At first my father didn't really believe it all, until he watched the life leave my mothers eyes. Now he as been watching me closer and he is terrified. I love my father I really do but I need to live...while I still can.78
I have my mother's blonde hair and bright blue eyes, I look just like her with her jaw line, heart shaped face, thin eyebrows, full lips, thin fit body. I don't eat much because I don't have to. I'm not always hungry like others, or like my dad. I play soccer and run track, I work out as much as I can and have fun. Some may say I'm perfect but I'm no where near. 910
I'm just trying to live my life before the day I do die, but then again there's that tiny bit of hope in my heart that I will live. That I'll survive whatever comes to me, and live till I'm old and my heart gives.1112
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Well this is different, but I'm hopeing to take this somewhere.
Please comment nicely, and please tell me what you really think., no "It was cool" and thats it, please leave real comments
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intriguing
Unsure where you are going to take this, will she break the curse or succumb to an early grave, could she break the cycle of death by not following in the footsteps of her female relatives and not marrying young but enjoying herself, maybe by living her life to the max she can enjo all of life's experiences by the time she is 17. Rewarded 6
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this is good chi lol. i wonder if it going to be such a short story due to the fact that she is going to die in like 3 weeks. ha ha ha you just cant learn to give up so easily now a days, that is good. hoping to read more chi.
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Haha No, I plan on writing it about the things that happen in those three weeks, and I didn't even realize you were on, I've been writing almost all day. Anyway hey, and thanks for commenting.
-Chi/Genesis
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This was a very interesting piece i like it great job!
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I like this alot. It draws me in with the first little bit. I have not really heard this idea before, which is a reason why I find it so interesting. I would LOVE to read more!
Kais =) x x
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Thanks for the comment, and oddly I did not start out as this but my fingers and mind took me to new heights.
-Genesis
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This is a really good idea! I could imagine this story making a really good novel about the girl.
Just to be a pain, 'dieing' is spelt dying. It's one of those silly words that I mix up too. Not that spelling matters to an author!
Also, sometimes you didn't use apostrophes like in 'birthdays in...' and 'mothers blonde...'. I know I'm being picky, but we did it at school.
Anyway, a great idea, and with a little more description, this will be a brilliant story.. Rewarded 8
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Ah, thanks for pointing those out. I forget about those alot, and I mixed those words up ALOT.
Thanks for the comment.
-Genesis
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