Hell raged releasing all it's primal fury and power. Flame and destruction rained on to thy world. Land split and was gouged by fire magma spewed forth from the ground. The earth and nature it self cried out it pain and suffering while being consumed by fire.1
In the deep woods of the world a roar of defiance called out its challenge to the fire and heat that spewed from the heart of the earth. 2
Then something unreal happened at the fringes of the forest the trees started consuming the fire! Vines crawled down the massive trunks of the trees they sought out the flowing rivers of lava. Vines connected with the lava but strangely the vines were unharmed by the heat it feed them power! The lava's heat consumed turned to stone while the vines continued their quest. Trees quivered and shook releasing their seeds they traveled on the heat updrafts and fell in gaping ravines in the ground, popping throwing vines to the sides of the ravines. The vines strained and heaved until the walls collapsed sealing the ravine.3
Out of the forest came a calming green glow emanating from a figure striding out of the woods. He was magnificent he was a centaur half man-half horse but he was more than that a seed rested on his chest glowing a lush green. Small vines grew forth from it crawling across him encircling his massive arms. His fists were formed completely from these he flexed his hands the fingers elongated into thorns. His hair was moss on his brow rested a crown fashioned from from the roots of the everliving oak.4
He gazed at the work of nature and smiled he was after all the Forest God. He dissolved into a green glowing mist and drifted far across the earth to a enormous volcano that soared up in the air almost reaching space. Chunks of molten rock flew from its maw raining down like asteroids to strike the earth.The mist soared up and up till it reached the summit. It condensed back into the Forest god whose gaze was fixed on one figure standing not ten paces away.5
He was robed in flame he looked like a normal man except for his eyes were fire from the furnace that burned inside him. This was the Overlord of Fire! As the Overlord of Fire spoke flame roared out magnifying his voice which rocked the earth, splitting fissure in the rock.6
"Why do you enter my sanctum lord of the forest!" He said with a smug look.7
The Forest Lord stared back his eyes glowed a deep radiant green.8
"You know why i am here."9
"Ah... yes about my flames destroying your precious forests... but then again what are u going to do about that?" the Fire Lord replied smugly.10
The Forest Lord remained quite but his eye's glowing hardened pulsing a menacing poison green. All the Fire lord did was twitch his eyelid and a gaping hole conjured under the Forest Lords feet lava spouted out seeking to consume him. He flexed one thorn claw the sides of the hole sprouted giant oak roots sealing the hole. The Fire Lord laughed uproariously sun hot waves of heat blasted the Forest Lord the vines on his body started to wither and the seed's glow in his chest stared to waver. Just as faint would have it this particular seed was from a Jack pine tree which would only open when exposed to extreme heat. The seed cracked open enormous root twice as thick as a man shoot out and encircled the Forest Lord. The Fire Lord raised a flaming eyebrow in surprise.11
Suddenly the Forest Lord grew the vines on his body replace by the giant roots he retained all of his of features only he was five stories tall. He pointed at the Fire Lord a bolt of green light struck the Fire Lord squarely in his chest. The Fire Lord roared out in fury as Jack pine roots enveloped him. With in seconds the Fire Overlord was replaced by a Jack pine tree of epic proportions12
which even towered over the Forest Lord.13
All was quite the Forest lord circled the tree examining it. In the maw of the volcano he heard a roar of rage. He turned his head not to his surprise he saw the Fire Lord reincarnated by fire. He raised his hands in the air. Fire screamed from cracks in the earth. It swirled and the Fire Lord in a vortex converging on him.14
A raging flame elemental rose up equal to the Forest Lord. The rushed in to grapple. The crash was tremendous they smashed in to the ground throwing up mountains of stone and dirt. Roots crawled from the Forest lord and grabbed at the Fire Lord. But fire surged so strongly it burned the roots to worthless ash. The Fire Lord grabbed with his flaming hands the sides of the Forest lords head.15
White flame engulfed the Forest Lord's head black smoke rose from his head. In a last effort the Forest lord made the same movement grabbing the Fire Lords head. Both cried out in horrible pain and agony. They fell away and collapsed on the ground. The Forest lord burnt horribly the glow in his eyes slowly winked out the forest lord had fallen! But not in vain for the Fire lord too was vanished mushrooms and molds and fungus all sorts of plants who love dark places grew everywhere on him. So the earth was turned into what it is today where the elements go as they please no longer governed by gods of nature or fire. 16
Author notes
favorite song has to be in the air tonight by: nonpoint
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Comments
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ok, judging by waht the little genre things are, this story doesnt fit any of my genres. and for goodness sakes, you didnt read the rules either or else there would be something in the authors notes.
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Capitalise your 'I's! (actually I only saw one that wasn't but they are annoying)
And there was a line-break that shouldn't have been there.
This was interesting but it was a bit too short for me and not very consistent.
Thankyou for entering and good luck
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I'm having trouble reading this. In my rules I stated that I wouldn't be too much of a grammar nazi but I'm sorry, this is just too hard for me to follow. If you brush it up and fix some things, I am sure it will be a good story. Thank you for entering.
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Interesting idea. I thought it was a little difficult to read though and parts of it I'm not even sure what happened. Keep trying though.
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YAY, THERE'S MORE! I don't have to hunt you down! (Or do I?
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Again, great imagery. You use wonderful description and do well with it; the entire fight is very easy to see in one's mind's eye.
Adding separate paragraphs each time a different person talks--and really, this is just to make things easier--will make it less difficult for the reader to concentrate on the story as they read. It is very easy to get distracted when there aren't multiple paragraphs. (Especially if, like me, you have a short attention span.
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In the very last sentence, the word "plz" was very out of place in a story where no other chat-speak is used.
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Wow. The imagery was fantastic; I could easily imagine the searing heat, the consuming flames... the burning magma. The Forest Lord is also very well described.
Your grammar is still your downfall!
It seems that you have gotten a little better, though--I've noticed a slight improvement. Beware of run-on sentences and missing punctuation!
I must say, the ending is severely suspenseful. It's almost unfair; if you do not finish soon, I may have to hunt you down...

~Radiance (Reel Treble
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