Murray and Bernie

Murray and Bernie1

Considered a Journey2

To see what the world had in store3

But said Bernie to Murray4

Don't be in a hurry5

It's cloudy and starting to pour6

And my back is sore7

And it might be a bore8

And it could be a chore9

There might be a war...10

Let's wait awhile...!11

Author notes

Essentially this is a Jack & Jill parody...but also combined with 3 Men in a Tub...and can also be seen to comprise a whole host of those Mother Goose Nursery Rhymes which envision such grandiose schemes and ideas to children. But this speaks of our enveloping and ubiquitous adult worries and concerns in today's life. Lol!

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  • LivingDeath-Mia silver member
    August 24

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    Wowwwww. That was nice. XD Good luck with the contest!


  • heartfullofvenom
    August 17

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    Wow you really thought out this one...I loved it1 I thought I was comical and enjoyable to read. Nice flow, neatly written.

    Good Luck!

    ♥


  • Andy Stephenson Greeters member
    August 17

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    hmm.

    It has the feeling of Jack and Jill in the beginning. It does bring up adult concepts in the remainder. The last line makes sense, but doesn't follow the rhyme scheme.

    On the whole, I found it entertaining

    Andy


  • Viola.King
    August 17
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    Bahaha!! Talk about excuses! Hilarious poem.