Childhood Memories

I vividly recall those days1

When childhood ruled my world2

Going over to friend’s houses3

Climbing on trees; hidden in leaves4

Sneaking ripe guavas in our pockets5

And then running away; laughing6

As the old man comes with a stick7

I still smile at sweet remembrance8

Of birthday parties and games9

Throwing pieces of cakes at birthday child10

Before being turned out by the angry mother11

I remember the sleep-over nights12

Bringing in teddies stealthily13

And then calling home late at night14

Asking for a forgotten toothbrush15

When it was time for bed; and lights off16

Each child quivered with fear17

Feeling for each other hands18

I love to sit back and remember the days19

When running after mischievous doings20

We used to wonder why grown-ups21

Still think we are innocent

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  • scriptor
    October 25

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    i almost wish that i could be a little child again, everything was happy and inocent back then... i think that many people do


  • BorntothePurple
    September 6

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    Wow, this is awesome! If I were running this contest, I would have given this one a trophy hands down, or at least put it in the finalists list! You write it so vividly, I can almost actually see what you are describing. Really awesome write, captures the feel of childhood. ONly part I'm not sure about is the ending- it seems like the whole poem WAS very innocent up until the end. Still a really great write.


  • Naive.
    August 30
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    I enjoy reading poems that are about childhood. =] I think you included some great memories and created a reminiscent mood. My only critcism is that this poem is GOOD, but could be GREAT if the flow was improved. Great stuff, though.

    Thanks for entering and good luck. =D

    -jj

  • Over and Over
    August 25

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    A Refreshing Read

    This poem was really touching, i love how you convey the innocence of childhood and still kept the poem readable to a mature audience, it made me miss my childhood. I particularly liked the opening two lines
    "I vividly recall those days
    When childhood ruled my world"

    that just sums up the poem and just the general naivety of children. Really nice poem that anyone can relate to, good job.