I am sending you this to read and hopefully enjoy. I believe it to be beautifully written and a enjoyable read. 1
I just wanted to thank you for taking the time out of your busy schedule to read this and hopefully enjoy it. trekkergirl2
COME BE WITH ME3
In the years that we have know each other 4
never before have I asked anything of you.5
However, I feel that now is the time. I have watched6
you and see your pain. I think that I can help. 7
So I ask this of you:8
Come walk with me.9
Side by side10
along unexplored seashores.11
Come share with me12
memories of a lonely childhood, 13
of lost loves, of choices made14
and then regretted.15
Let us sit16
arm in arm17
watching as the moon18
dances enchantingly along the moonlit sky.19
let us touch20
this one time21
our cascading emotions 22
igniting passions23
kept silent by duty.24
Let me show you 25
that I…26
and only I27
can show you what love is.28
Others have tried you cry out29
your voice weeping in its loneliness.30
What can you offer that they could not?31
Love I whisper gently cradling your broken heart 32
within my hands.33
It is 34
that my heart knows you…35
My Soul 36
accepts you…37
My arms 38
want you.39
And I…40
I need you.41
In a list
A contest entry
- Short, Useful and Profitable by gerifitzsimmons.
600 points, ended September 6, 2008, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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You have a lovely poem and your use of lyrics is captivating.
Do you have in mind a particular magazine or group of publications that is receptive to this type of writing? If you can give us a few ideas on where to offer your work, we would consider representing you.
Please return this letter with your recommendations and an attachment containing more of your work.
blah…blah…You may just get one of these…
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actually several of my poems have and are being printed in several fanzines. Which if you didn't know are fan printed magazines. I usually have them printed in fanzines that are star trek based.
Just wanted to thank you for the honorable mention. I really appreciate it.
I have had sometimes like 40-50 poems printed since the 1980s. It's always fun isn't it when you get the word that sometime you have written will be in a fanzine so the world can read it.
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This was a wonderful poem that really reached to my heart. You write very well. It had a flow to it that put me at ease as i trekked along listening to every word spoken. What a beautiful picture these words painted. Take a bow, Trekkergirl.
beginning: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, characters: 5.
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Bravo!
Excellent use of imagery! This is very much so my favorite poem that I have come across so far! You describe your emotions so accurately its almost as if I too was there. Beautifully written and I think you captured the true essence of your emotions within this poem. Bravo! Bravo! Bravo! Very lovely write. Keep up the good work.
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