Hopscotch and Fairywings

A toddler girl sits on the sidewalk,
and she plays-
she draws flowers with her chalk,
and reminds me of my childhood days.1

When did we stop playing with toy cars,
and start driving real ones?,
When did we stop reaching for the stars,
and trade hopscotch for long treadmill runs?2

At what age did we stop chasing fireflies
and things?,
When did we start telling lies
and take off our fairy-wings? 3

We did we stop watching the clouds float by,
and coloring on the walls?
When did we stop asking the question why,
and stop giving Grandma daily phone calls?4

When did we stop making precious little bouquets,
when did we stop inventing up fake words?
At what age did we stop creating little plays,
and stop fighting with plastic swords?5

What happened to our Princess costumes,
and our fake high heels?,
Our bright pink bedrooms,
and our peanut butter jelly meals?6

When did we stop flying Barbie kites,
and playing make believe?
When did we start having fights,
when did our childhood leave?7

The little girl gets her chalk all ready,
and she slowly writes her name,
holding the chalk so still and steady,
then when its done she feels like fame.8

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  • Andy Stephenson Greeters member
    November 5
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    Good rhyme

    I like the idea of this poem. When do we make the transition from child to adult? It does just kind of seem to happen. Anyway, at times I feel like a teenager. I don't go back much further than that.

    Thanks for entering For Serious About Reviews Group Only.

    Andy


  • Sgs gold member
    September 26

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    This is awesome, the title is just wonderful. Some of the rhymes seem forced, such as in the last stanza, but the feeling of this is so true. Love it, thanks for the entry!


  • Rhubarb
    August 25

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    This is really sweet. Everthing rhymes well with only a few rhythem issues. You wrte very well for your age, and captured the mood of the poem.
    Well done.


  • Prim-Rose
    August 20

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    This poem was amazing and well written! Your imagery and they way you rhymed without being artificial was brilliant. Great job!


  • StreetRoller
    August 20

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    This is a very well written poem. It very wonderful I suppose. And you got to say that the background mathes up with this master piece. Good job!


  • StarryDecemberDream
    August 18

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    Wow! That was an amazingly beautiful poem! I love the deep meaning behind it, you captured the nostalgic feeling beautifully and a lot of people can relate! I absolutely loved this, you did a fantastic job here. Keep up the great work!

    ~*Princess*~ I'm still a fairy princess


  • Bellerina
    August 16

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    That is such a cool poem!
    Really nostalgic and all that.
    I wonder when I actually did stop doing things like that. It makes you kind of sad.

    The way it's written is really nice. I love it.


  • BreakingDawn
    August 16

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    I really miss those days. Everything seemed simpler when you felt like a princess waiting for your prince charming.

    This was a great poem and very well-written; the rhyme suits this piece. I enjoyed reading this, thank you for sharing it.


  • Kagamine Rin
    August 15
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    Aw!

    I loved this! This is a very good poem! Once more people read this who are about over sixteen will question themselvies: When DID I stop doing that? XD! Awesome job!

    I connected so much to this poem! You're a great poet. You should make more that are like this. =3

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