"Mommy... I don't want to die." A young girl said, sitting across from me in the ship's valut. The mother grasped the girl and brought her to her chest, squeezing her.1
"You not going to die, sweetheart. I wont let you." A tear rolled down the mother's cheek and drops to the ground. 2
I ran my fingers through my hair. It's really the end of the world. 3
"The world..." A crackling vioce came over the speakers next to me. "Will be flooded in less than... 4 minutes."4
People cried out for their family, running past me.5
I brought my knees up to my face and laid my face on them. The ship bounced to the left, everyone slid down the ship's vault. 6
Someone screamed. I lifted my weak head up and looked around the people. "No." I stood up. "Everyone!" I yelled, getting their attition. "I need to to move to the center of the ship's vault! Now!" Everyone moved, balanceing the weight. 7
The water slowly spilled into the vault, people watching it, waiting. I looked at the young girl. She was crying, tears rolling down her boney cheeks. 8
"You." I said, holding my hand out to her. "Come with me." The mother looked a tme. 9
"You can't take my child!" She screamed, kicking at me. 10
"I'm going to save her." I stated, pushing my hand closer. 11
The mother's lip trembled. "Mommy?" The girl asked, pulling away. "What going on?" 12
I watched the mother lift the girl and push her to me. I swinked at her and smiled. "I'll keep her save, I swear." I picked the girl up as the water reached knee length. I ran down the vault as fast as possible, the water kicking onto the walls and people. 13
I reach ed the end of the vault and screamed up the ladder, "Leak!" People stories above me, looked off the edge and screamed, seeing the water. "We have a small child!" My voice cracked gripping the girl as the water reached my waist. "Help!" 14
Officers appeared 10 or so stories above. One screamed something I couldn't hear. I wasn't about to let this girl die like this. I stuck her to the ladder and told her to climb. She looked down the vault and started to cry again. "Mommy?" She asked. 15
I watched the mother's eyes, she motioned for me to take her daughter. I nodded and smiled. I mouthed the words- God Bless You.16
I pushed the girl up the ladder, following closly behind. 17
I reached 4 stories ahead and looked down, the water had reached the next level. The girl's mother was dead, I felt my heart sink. 18
I focused my attition back on the girl, she was the only thing. I bit my lower lip and told her to climb as fast as she could. 19
She started to climb faster. "Thank you." I felt a tear roll down my cheek, I gripped the ladder and pushed myself along. 20
We reached the officers, the grabbed the girl and helped me into the safty cavern. "You don't realize what you just did?" One Officer asked.21
"I don't care if you kill me... This girl is young, she can't die this way!" I threw my arm at the girl. "She like... 7..." 22
An officer put a hand on my shoulder and pushed me along. "Where you going?" The girl asked, her eye watching me. 23
"I'll be back... I swear!" I screamed, the officer kicking me. 24
We walked down the safty cavern, the officers watching me with hating eyes. "You've broken the only law on this ship!" The officer said, a hint of german. "You will die! The only way to kill you without any hard-ship to us, is to drown you in the Earth!" He reached the end and opened a small turning door, 45 stories below was blue, all blue. "Go!" He screamed, pushing me onto a small platform. I nearly stumbled over the edge. 25
"Please!" Someone screamed, it was a squeeky voice. I looked back. 26
"Don't!" I screamed. The girl was running downt he cavern trying to reach me. "Stay in there!" I screamed. Officer's trying to grab the girl fell over and cursed. 27
She reached me. "No!" I screamed, pushing her back. "You can't do this!" She screamed to let me back out.28
"I have nothing else!" She cried. I stopped.29
She was me. I'd lost my family years ago, when the flooding was just semi. I sighed nervously. "Do you really want to die like this?" I asked. 30
She nodded and grabbed my arm. "If you have nothing, why live?" She asked. The girl was young, but she was smart. 31
"Fine." I shook my head. An Officer tried to grab her and pull her back in, but she bit him. 32
"Ungreatful little brat!" He screamed, closing the door. 33
The rising water slowly made its way up. I sat on the edge, the girl followed. The girl's eyes watched the water, each wave reflecting in her sky blue eyes. 34
"Did you have anything?" She asked, looked at me. 35
"Everything." I smiled, the water reached our knee's hanging over the edge. "Anything anyone would want." I sighed. "You don't really realize how great something is until its gone." I knew she didn't understand what I said. 36
The girl suprized me, by standing up and getting ready to jump in. She smiles, jumping in. 37
I watching her sink, the water slowly engulfing her. I stood up. I shake my head and look up a the sun one last time, it's warmth so great. 38
I jump, the world freezes, my feet barely in the freezing blue water. I look over at the ship, it slowly disappearing. My face goes cold, the colors fade to darkness. My air runs out, I smile and slowly float downward. 39
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For death is no more than a turning of us over from time to eternity- Willaim Penn. 41
Author notes
I found the picture on photobucket... I just had to write it... I sudden urge!
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http://media.photobucket.com/image/the%20end%20of%20the%20world/pinkj288192/end-of-the-world.jpg?o=39
I believe I chose option 2... or 3... The one about the world Ending. 
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Comments
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"balanceing" - 'balancing'
"boney" - 'bony'
"a tme" - self-explanatory, really.
"I swinked at her" - you did what?
"I'll keep her save" - you mean safe.
"I reach ed" - 'reached'
"closly" - 'closely'...
I could go on, but I won't. The idea behind your story is very powerful and interesting, but I specifically stated in my rules that some level of spelling/grammatical awareness was required.
Besides which, you haven't made me aware of which other story you've commented on (another rule). I'm very sorry if this seems harsh, but I wrote those rules for a reason. -
Whoa....o.o Bit confused on why they would kill the savior. Something about a war? Very emotional. I liked this a lot.
The ending touched me. 
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[a tme.] swinked(winked) [reach ed] attition(attention) the(should be they, in context) safty [downt he] suprized
This was a really good story idea and it was well written. You just need to go back and fix the spelling errors(I may have missed some). Besides spelling, it was really good.
But color and fruit?beginning: 5, language: 4, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 4, characters: 5.
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Applause for myself!!! wooo!!! that was rude and mentally stupid...
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This was...just wow. It was filled with suspense, emotion, good dialogue, and an even better flow. You did awesome - and don't say you didn't, because you did. Great job.
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Gah... thanks. *sigh* Just seems no one really knows what is going on...
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I'm pretty sure I got what was going on.....but since you think I didn't - what is going on?
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It not that you in parcicluar, its everyone.
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Ah ok. Well what are we missing then?
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We aren't missing anything.
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Ok you lost me there.
I'll just take your word for it then.
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Right. Just like everyone else.
Its just so sad... You'll pick on it, in about 70 or so years.
I just know about it before everyone else because I actually care.
Think about that for 70 years, then tell me what I'm talking about.
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Oook, so I just read the comment and then read the last line...I think I know what you're getting at now. Though not sure, so I'd rather not say and sound like a total fool.
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PR, you've got a mind, let the thoughts begin. Im never telling you what I mean.
Angels on the Moon is kinda a hint, but not really, but yeah, its got the point going.
Think what you will, PR, your never gonna know for sure.
(Deep in thought- Deep in Charater. VH)
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I got that and yep, that confirmed what I was thinking. Huh, you're a pretty deep person - a good thing these days. Anyways good job on the story again.
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Woah! I was at the edge of my seat reading this. I was like "HURRY!" "Save the little girl!" "Don't die now!" Great emotion, dialouge and flow!
♥ Nancy ♥
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you are soo over-dramatic...
I thinks its horrible honestly... but no need to bring myself down...
Did you see that freaking awesome picture?!?!?!?! my gawd, its like the coolest picture eva!
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