Arguments

"You're dumb!" She yelled across the playground at the top of her small lungs. Her tiny hands balled into fists at her sides. She was shaking in rage.
"You are stupid and I hate you!" A boy replied. His shirt was torn, his green shorts smeared with mud.
"I hate you back, you slimy froggy idiot!"
"You smell!"
"You eat worms!"
The girl was the first to fire. She leaned down, her frilly skirt brushing the ground as her hand searched along the bark of the playground. It closed around something hard. An acorn. "You dumb boy!" She yelled, flinging her arm back behind her head spinning her arm forwards, letting go in just the right place. The acorn spun forwards, twirling in a sharp arc, right across the playground - an impressive feat for a girl of just 6 - before hitting the boy square in his temple. He let out a roar of pain, groping around blindly among the bark for something to send in return. His hand found a small toy soldier, half buried in the dirt, broken and forgotten. He held the toy to his chest, he squinted back to the girl, aiming her up. One of her long pigtails had come out, hanging in a tangled mass down to her waist. A long trail of dark dirt smudged along her cheek. She had a fierce look on her face.
"You're stupid!" He cried.
"You said that before you dumbo!"1

"I know it's true!" He yelled, drawing his arm back and letting the soldier fly.2

The soldier came down hard on top of the girl's head, she screamed furiously. A small piece of bark spun flew the air. Cracking loudly on the small boy's skull. Followed in quick succession by a lolly-pop stick and an empty yogurt pot, idly left behind by a child who didn't really care.3

A torrent of leaves, bark and a long-forgetten spoon flew back at the girl. Anger bubbled within the boy's chest. He'd had about enough of her.

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Not finished.
It might not seem like it, but it is a happy little story thing.

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  • Bellerina
    August 16, 2008
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    Thanks!
    It isn't actually finished... Sorry about that.


  • Pixels
    August 13, 2008
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    These characters seem very real, typical kids. It was interesting, I don't know if you're going to continue this or not. I think that you could have put in why they were arguing in there, it would have made it a little easier to understand. Good job.

    ~Kate-kat


  • Infectious Insanity
    August 13, 2008

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    cool. this reminds me of that movie we watched before the chunuk bair movie.
    its really realistic and true to little peoples.

    Me.
    J'adore My Chemical Romance

  • cheetahgal
    August 13, 2008

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    Tis was really good. It reminded me of my playground/recess days. The beginning really drags the reader in with the short dialog. Really, it was a good argument. It was very realistic for six year old children, the language, voice and all. Except, I wouldn't use the word "hate" in it, most children that age do not know that word. But everything else was very realistic. Your adjectives and word choice made it very vivid and realistic. Good Job!!