Fate: Book of Life. Short over view

An ordinary girl with an ordinary life is taken on an extraordinary change that threats all she believes in.  Seventeen year old Kayla Vive has always known she wanted something greater but had accepted that her life would always be a disappointment. Things change when her father returns from an overseas trip and once again claims that Kayla can’t possibly be his daughter. Another blood test proves that she isn't not only that, Kayla may not be her mother's daughter either. Then when Kayla gets injured running away from high school taunters, she according to doctors not only died but had lost over four pints of blood. Yet she needed no medical attention. Things begin to get weirder when enemies of Kayla start dropping dead and alive again with new found adoration for her. And she keeps have dreams of two ppl making, and Mahla visits too. Through her dreams she sees a new world. One connected to her and a balanced relam, if tipped, could bring both crashing down. Birth, Life, and Death have been in constant conflict since time
Life berates death, which hates its passion for birth. The three will fight for power  ending the struggle  for once and for all.
 
 
 

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This is just a little bit. that i still have in my notebook. Do you think it's any good? What sugesstions do you have? Is there anything you would change? THNX

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  • winterdreamtiger
    October 6, 2008
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    I think this is actually a cool idea however I found it a little bit confusing. Who's Mahla? And if it's another blood test, how come she didn't find out her father wasn't really her father at the first blood test? I think this could be really good, keep going!