On the painted floorboards, the patter of little feet.1
The twittering of birds in the summer heat.2
Crystal glasses are filled with tea and lemonade,3
and children explore everything, unafraid,4
trudging on in their make believe crusades.5
Many eyes sweep across the grassy lawn.6
Noises of rockers and tired yawns.7
Sheets are hung on a line between the trees,8
and they sway in the breeze.9
Crickets chime in,10
and evening begins.11
Children still play and tease, 12
but it’s not long before they run to mothers and fathers with skinned knees.13
Fireflies start to glitter and glint,14
and candles are lit.15
Calls are made, “It’s time for bed!”16
Groans and cries are heard, they’d much rather keep playing, instead.17
They start to trample up the stairs, 18
and the children with sleepy eyes are told to say their prayers.19
Goodnights are said,20
heads hit the pillows,21
and covers and blankets are played with until they billow.22
Many eyes close,23
and parents creep down the stairs on their toes.24
Their sighs of relief are heard, 25
and they climb into their own beds with hardly a word.26
A contest entry
- Weather by ForThePlague.
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Comments
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Aedromr. Your descriptions of a normal summer day fit my neighborhood perfectly. And, in March, that sounds like the PERFECT day. Thanks for entering and good luck
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thank you. =]
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What does this mean?:
and covers and blankets are played with until they billow.
?? I don't get it
Doesn't billow mean like flow, or "hang and move"?
Like billowing in the breeze?
Jesus Lenore
This is so imaginable though
I can taste the lemonade, like no joke
And I love it, because I used to be like this
It was my favorite happy poem by you so far
Seriously
Amazing props, I loved this SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO MUCH
I would eat it, if it were a cake -
Lovely.
You have done this with economy and simplicity - well done. I had no trouble getting into it, although you started with a cliche' - the patter of little feet - when it became part of the rhyme I relaxed.
Enjoyed it.



