A Hero is Born

He watches with tears in his eyes as his father is murdered. His dad dances a twisted dance of death as he is whipped around like a rag doll under the impact of the bullets. He hides behind a dumpster, paralyzed with fear. The robbers go through his pockets. All he had in his pocket was thirty-eight cents. He was murdered for thirty-eight cents. He sits, still gripped with terror as the robbers run away.1

His innocence shattered and his childhood destroyed, he sees the evils of the world at the tender age of six. He makes a vow to never let another person die in front of him. He promises to train himself and to stand up for all that is good and true. It is then that a hero is born. He learns to shoot guns and throw knives. He trains in the martial arts. Every day his body gets stronger and his mind sharper. He grows to be a man and realizes his dream.2

Thinking of his father that was murdered for thirty-eight cents, he puts on a mask and begins to strike back at the criminals. Striking out of the darkness, he takes them by surprise and instills the fear of god in them. His name is spoken in frightened whispers throughout the underworld. Stories of his vigilante attacks pop up all over the news. The stories are exaggerated and embellished. He becomes a symbol to those downtrodden people in the ghetto who live in fear of the gangs. He turns into the stuff of legend. A bullet proof superhero who fights for the weak.3

A small child, only six, walks home from school one day. Suddenly, a gun gets stuck in his face. Paralyzed with fear, he stares at the scruffy man holding the gun. Suddenly, a knife his the muggers hand , causing him to drop the gun. The hero charges, knocking him to the ground and beating him to a pulp. The child watches in wonder and awe of the hero. The hero holds the knife to the muggers throat. The mugger begs and pleads for mercy.4

This is what the hero loved. To instill fear in the heart of those who use fear as a weapon. To fight fire with fire. Satisfied that he had instilled the fear of god in the mugger, the hero let him go. The mugger ran away screaming. 5

The child tearfully thanked the hero profusely. The child asked the hero why he did what he did. The hero responded with only one word. Hope. The child told the hero how he thanked god for heroes like him who always protected the weak. He said that he wanted to be just like the hero some day.6

The hero had tears in his eyes as he told the child that he would not wish his pain and suffering on his worst enemy and that nobody would want to live his life if they knew what it was like. The hero went on to say that if the child relied on some one else to show up and save the day that he would only be let down. He told the child that he must always be strong and keep hope in his heart. The child hung on every word. He didn't understand, but he listened intently anyway.The hero walked him home and once again told him to always be strong and always have hope.7

The child told and retold the story as he grew older. As he grew older he gained a better understanding of what the hero had told him that fate full day. He never met the hero again, though he payed close attention to his exploits in the news. He trains himself just as the hero did. He stays strong and keeps hope in his heart as the hero said. Then one day, his world is shattered. He sees on the news that the hero was found dead in a drug den. Thinking of that fate full night and remembering all that the hero stood for, the child vows to carry on his legacy. He wears a mask and strikes at the criminals just as the hero did. It is then that a hero is born.

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  • Vampiric souls
    March 20

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    This is really amazing!! It is well written and is so interesting!! It is really well written!!
    Great Job!!
    Thank you so much for entering!!
    ~Souls !!

  • HoneyAngel
    March 15

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    This was interesting. I don't think it was as well thought out and written as it could be, but still an interesting plot-line. I'm sure that in time and with some revision this could be a lot better.

    Thank you for entering and Good job.

    Angel


  • Kagamine Rin
    November 21, 2008

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    Very good. I like it. The story was very good and had a deep meaning. Although I suggest that you add a bit more detail and emotion. It came to me a bit dry.

    Good job, though, it was a pretty good story. I wish you luck in the contest!~


  • Celestial Rose
    November 5, 2008

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    an interesting view point. I was a little confused about it, but I understand now that I've read the full thing. Good job!


  • Neolittlefish
    October 20, 2008

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    Very nicely written and it had a good little message in there. If you wanted to you could make it even longer and embelish it a little. However it's still really good how it is!


  • RxxSpiritWolfxxJ
    October 18, 2008

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    Good story. Sort of reminded me of Batman ... you could work a tad on your grammar (not to worry, nothing major ).
    I loved your message though. Well done.

    RJ


  • Six-Feet-Underwater
    September 15, 2008

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    This is a great story. I love the lesson and the ending on how the child takes over. A beautiful story. Great job!


  • legnA-livE
    August 12, 2008
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    wow!!!!!!!!!.....i love this!!!!!!!!!!

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