Sun rides warm island breezes to shine on an old white cross. The stone is one of many. It marks a long, fading din, lingering in the palms, from the birthday of death. 1
A contest entry
- Just... Words. by Taylor Renee.
350 points, ended August 16, 2008, 25 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Had to read
I guess the simpler the better in relation to Iwo Jima. The Marine Corps suffered 25% of all WWII casualities on Iwo Jima. The Japanese were dug in and considered this one of the first attacks on the mainland. This is an eloquent statement re: the "birthday of death." Don't know that people reverence the sacrifices made so they could enjoy Starbucks, the internet, etc. More's the shame.
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Excellent
I had to read it twice as I had not paid attention to the title. Initially I thought it referred to Christ (the cross) and his triumph over death, but that made no sense. (That would make it the death of death) But really it is written perfectly, it is my lack not yours. -
it was nice.
The 2 sentences were pretty good. i wish it would be longer, they say a picture is worth 1000 words, and you seemed to sum it up into 33. i would have liked it much better it it was longer. i know i didnt ssay anything about te length, but i would probably have enjoyed muchmore if it had been longer.
It was good writing though, so i will give you credit for that.
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Powerfully worded - very strong and vivid imagery. Impressively condensed story... excellently done!
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I think i read this before...wonder why i didn't comment. Thanks for entering and best of luck. This was more of a statement than a story.
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Wow.
This was so powerful; so strong in as few words as it is. Just what I wanted.
It's different than the others, which is just what I wanted, too.
It says so much. And you worded it perfectly. Absolutely.
I just love every word of it, as sad as it is.
This is wonderful. Great work. Thank you so much for entering my contest, and I wish you the absolute best of luck.
Oh, and for your gender? I'm horrible at this. I have NO idea!
xoxo
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Tay
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Oh, wow. War saddens me more than anything else. It is frightening, yes, but I always think about the loss of life first. I love the way you describe, though, so well done.
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