She cries as the knife cutts her skin leaving the twenty-second cut on her arm. The blood barely comes out making her cutt another. "Carmen! The bus will come soon" Carmen looks up and makes one last deep cutt making her sream. The blood flows more fluently and she cried when she thought about the accident she trys to grab the knife again but her eleven year old sister Mary came out of nowhere and grabbed th knife before her.Mary gave her a death glare but couldnt hold in the tears and walked away with the bloody knife saying "I hate you!"
Carmen sat there alone
in her room
thinking shes a loon
with twenty-four cutts on her arm
Grabbing her phone
Her feelings are always unknown. 1
Carmen grabbed her wristband and shed one last tear and headed for the bus. She grabbed the railing and forced herself to go up on the steps. SHe felt eyes burning on her skin, staring at her wondering what goes on in her life and if they should care.
"Carmen...." the girl on her right said across the seat.
"Wh-aaa-t-t?"
"Do you want to hang out this saturday?"
"With me?" Carmen said looking around her.
"Umm yeah...of course."
"Well I dont know"2
Carmen noticed the expression on her face and the disbelief in her voice when she said those words. She was afraid that the girl was put up to it and that something bad might happen.3
"No."
The bus came to a stop and Carmen quickly got up to avoid the girls response, she actualy seemd realieved. B****!4
As the rest of the day went on I got rude and mean comments thrown at me because the word got out that I cut myself and was bisexaul.I ran into that girl a couple times, the girl from the bus. She told that her name was Bethany. She had the same style as me. Dark crazy hair with random colors, band T-shirts, converse, and vans. She was pretty nice and, well I think I might have a crush on her.5
At the end of the day I walked home not wanting to go on the bus and face the giant crowd. I begin to go on my way when Bethany just jumped from behind and gave me the most beautifull smile. Chrystall white teeth, red small firm lips, and a small lip ring that ruined the seriousness of her smile. That lip ring just turned me on though.6
"Bethany! Umm what are you doing outside not in the bus?'
"Well I saw that you live pretty close to me and since your walking maybe this would be a good time to get to know eachother!"
"Maybe this wont be such a good idea."
"Why not Carmen?"Bethany said with a frown on her face.
"Huh, well I have a horrid life right now it wont be a good idea."
"Do you cut yourself." Bethany said but with more of a statement.
"What kind of question is that?!?! Just forget about it!"
"Wait! I should've asked more nicely."
"Damn right you should've!"
"I'm sorry. Since I used to cut I thought it wouldnt be very insulting."
"Oh ,sorry. I didnt know that." Carmen wanted to tell her so bad that she was bi.
She was afraid that she would lose her new friend.
"Well this is your house,Am I right?"
"Yeah."
"Wow, I've never seen your smile its so pretty."
"Thank you, I like yours to." 7
The two just stood there infront of the house, gazing into one anothers eyes.8
"Carmen!" Mary yelled from her window.
"WHAT!!!"
"Dinner time." Mary closed the window and headed down the stairs.
"Well bye Bethany see you tomorrow."
"Bye!" Bethany headed home and Carmen just watched her. 9
She noticed thats its already been three minutes since her sistes outburst. Carmen grabbed a plate of pasta,coke, and headed to the table. She would always eat in her room, but shes happy now she wanted to show her feelings to her family just this one time...with a smile on her face.10
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Author notes
UNFINISHED! I'll make it longer and more detailed soon.
Comments
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This is really good story!
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I love this story!!! Great job, it was awesomely awesome!!
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ohh i love it,this just got my attention,and i..couldn't..look ...away..
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Wow
i lost all thought because it was so involving
i loved it, the detail, the grousome reality
it was amazingly accurate on situations like that
i would deffinetly write more
and do change a thing as far as what your concept is
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loved it xD !!
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This is crazy good. I loved this, please continue it, make it longer, I'm almost dieing with anticipation....gawd this rocks
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Hey Friend
I think this was well written...and intersting!I'm obsessed
Good Job
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This is really good, even though the subject is very deep and sad... Your descriptions of these difficult things are very good. It struck a cord in me because I have a friend who went to such lengths with the 'whole cutting' thing. Her arm is covered in scars, and this reminded me of that.
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Yeah, well I've been threw this but nowhere near even 10 cutts. THANK YOU!!!
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I have no experience with cutting, and hope I never will. This story-poem was really sad. The last part was a poem, right? I just don't understand cutting. Some people do it because it's "the only pain they can control" or "escape" or "the only way out" or, etc. Some people do it for attention. I'm extremely squeamish and hemophobic, and I can't stand anything once inside the body, outside the body, except for tears. To me, crying is a way of release, screaming, storming, but not self injury. Why cause yourself pain, when you're already suffering so much? You could "Kill" yourself. "kill!". Why would you do that? Her sister in the story was right to take the knife away, but not right to say "I hate you". The right words in this situation are not labels like "emo" or hate, but "I love you" and "I'll always be here for you." Thanks for posting this. Great job.
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Thank you! I totaly understand honestly I used to be a cutter and I dont have over that many cuts I really dont have that many but I understand what your saying but before my parents and church knocked some sense into me I wouldnt have understood.
The story is suppose to be dramatic until the end!
Yes the last part was a poem1 Thank you
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This was very sad to read. Rang to the heart and sounded real, pulling on emotions. spelling issues, but overall, very good! Great job!
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THIS SAD
THIS IS SO SAD why would any-one cut their self does she knows she slowly killing her-self nothing that cause strees. she is needing for help.........nice story i like it it's dark and true -
Damn, I can't wait until you make this into a story. It sounds really amazing. I will deff read more when you post more! Awesome write!
Sabrina
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Thanks but you have to wait for the next story!
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Woah!
Hey, why is Carmen a cutter dude? That's really scary! If it hurts her, why does she do it? Plus, she should listen to her sister Mary.
Write more! You got me interested!
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