It just gave me a feeling like, I don’t know. Like no matter how angry or stressed I was about my life, for a few seconds the world was beautiful. The grass was green and the sky was blue. The sun was shining and the wind sang through the trees. Like my mother was there and would always be. Like my hair would always be in braids and I would never have to tie my own shoes. Like I would never get sick of the color pink or the smell of roses. Like nothing could strip me of my joy.
A contest entry
- Drabbles by trekkergirl.
200 points, ended September 2, 2008, 22 entries
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Comments
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It was nice. I like the way you discribed hwer feelings, I think you could definitly go further with this, but it's up to you. good job =DD
-Dani -
Okay this didn't really read like a story read more like you started a story and chose a part in the middle and gave that to me. However, it was cute the way you said no matter how angry or stressed you were the world was beautiful for a few seconds I liked that. Good luck in the contest
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Beautiful
This is a beautiful paragraph full of hope. Taken on it's own it speaks volumes, it has warmth and a yearning for happy times and is full of a joy obviously hoped for.
If one can catch a glimpse of that beauty it means that it is still there and all we have to do is look for it. Having the benefit of a few years on the clock I know how life can sometimes grab you by the bits and squeeze but then it is important to think on and look for those sunny moments.
Being occasionally prone to gloom this paragraph is a great encourager. Keep hold of the joy and keep writing. Thank you
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