Damn it! Once again the damn lift had got stuck. I was about to press the alarm button when a voice boomed over me. Stuck again Matt? I guess security were getting used to this. Yes I moaned.
"Whoa!" The lift jercked and went shooting up.
You might say, get the stairs or another lift, but I live in an apartment. The ones that you can only get to via lift.I have terrible luck with mine.
I had barley got in when the phone rang, I smiled whn I saw the name, Martha. My girlfriend. We had been together for 17 months and I was thinking of proposing.
Marhta was beutiful, she had long hair and the sweetest personality, We met on a train, she sat down next to me and I fell in love right there and then. I know it sounds cheesy, but I slipped my number into her bag when she wasnt looking. And a few weeks late, SHE PHONED ! We've been together ever since.
I snatched up the phone
"Hello" She wispered.
"Martha! Is everything alright?"
"No, I feel like were falling apart, like you dont know really know me. Meet me at my favourite resteraunt In an hour. Or its over"
She hung up. I couldnt beleive it, what was she on about?
I rushed out, thankfully the lift held, and it was only once I was in the cab I realized I'd forgot my wallet. I didnt care, I just had to get to Martha !
Soon though, I heard a crying noise from the back, so natuarly curious, I looked around. It was a baby!
"Hey pal, is she yours?" I questioned the driver
"Na, some chick payed me to drive her around. said someone would pick her up.
I reached into the back and picked her up, she was adorable, she had a baby pink baby grow on.
"Hello" I cooded.
She went quiet and shuffled her head under my arm.
"You have kids I take it" chukled the driver
"No" It was blunt. I wasnt going to lie.
Just then I noticed a note celotaped to her back,
"Tune your radio to 66.6" what did that mean ?
"Hey, can I play this?" I guestured to the sterio
"Go for it"
I turned the cold knob to 66.6
Nothing
...
"Hello Matt"
My eyes widened, my heart raced, the driver looked,well,confused,
"Are you called Matt?" he asked
"Shhhh"
"Okay, Im only a driver I ju..." he drifted off
"Take a peek under your seat" said the radio
I was petrified, but I looked.
It was a camcorder.
"Thats it, play back the footage" was he watching me ?
The radio went silent.
I played it.
It was Martha.
Its been an hour Sam. Sam? Who's Sam?
The camera turned, there was Sam, I take it you got my message.
It was radio man. Sam. He was much younger than me, with a scruffy beard to match scruffy hair. He reminded me off the homless guy at the end of my street. Was she cheating on me ?
It turned back to Martha.
She was sitting on a laminate floor, her eyes were red and puffy.
She looked at the camera and said :
"I waited Matt. You didnt come"
"I waited" her eyes scrunched up,like she was confused.
She seemed so distant. Id never seen her like this before, she was always on a high.
I snapped back to reality and checked the time. 8.43.
I had missed her, but how,Id only just got in the cab.
"My favourite restraunt is divided by 10"
"1hr divided by 10 is 6. You had 6 minutes Matt"
Realization kicked in
"So this is it!" I screamed.
"Your probarly shouting by now. Look in the dashboard"
I opened it, It was a walkie talkie
"The Camera went dead,"
"Martha?" i spoke into the speaker
"Hello,Matt."
"Is this it, 17 months, down the drain! I was going to propose at our Bolvords booking on Sunday"
Bolvords was the Swanky place up town, I took me 4 months to get a reservation.
"I know Matt, it was clearly obvious"
"But you see, we'll always be together, you have me in your arms"
"What"
"The baby, GiGi, shes yours, shes me and you"
"You mean..."
"Yes"
"Bye, Matt. I love Sam, were going together"
"Going where!"
That was the last I heard. Untill the next day, on the news. A young couple wearing wedding rings were found dead in an Apartment. It is beleived that the girl, Martha Maystaf's ex boyfriend killed them.
Yes thats right, I was arrested for their murder. I dont know how they did it.
Okay I lied. I know exactly how they did it. I didnt realize at first. But I soon pieced it together.
Sam, scruffy Sam was the cab driver. I remember now, when I first got in he said.
"Hi, Im Sam." And If Id paid more attention I would have realized.
And the bizzare thing was, 2 years later, when GiGi's came to visit me her first words were,
"Hi Daddy, Im Sam"
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Hmm. I think this was a very interseting take on the prompt. I think it needs a rewrite though, to make it a little easier to understand. It took me reading it over a few times to really get the gist of what was going on. I think this is a great start but needs a bit more work.
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Thanks
thanks.
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This was really kind of confusing and very choppy. I think you should have gone more in depth and made it longer. It was kind of hard to follow and there were many spelling and grammatical errors. You have a really good idea, but I think it needs some more work. Good luck in the contest.
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Thanks
I always have trouble describing things, ill try the now.
|Thanks I LOVE honest opinions
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You're welcome.
I know a lot of people don't like that so I wasn't sure >.< lol -
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yeah I hate when I writesomething crappy and folks are like, yeah its great !
Just be honest
*sigh*
But thanks again XD
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