I Wish

I wake up, I go to school. In my gym class, I see you running, I see you laughing with your popular friends. You really aren't like them, I can see it in your eyes. You act like a jerk only to fit in, just to impress others and have an " image". You are within my grasp, yet worlds away at the same time. I see you at lunch, hanging around those preppie girls, swinging their honey-blonde hair over their shoulders, following you around. I wish you could just please stop acting like something you are not and notice me. Everytime I catch you looking hurt, standing away from your friends, feeling left out, I almost cry. I know you don't want to be with them, but you decide to just to become popular. I wish you were like me, shy and timid and then we could meet and I could tell you all my feelings. I have so many feelings toward you, I could not express it in words. To show you how I feel, I would wrap my arms around you, breathe in your wonderful scent, kiss you on the cheek, and whisper sweet words into your ear. I want to hold your hand, I want to be your lover, I wish to be your girlfriend. I have loved you all through junior high, and you had no idea I even existed. You look at me, but you look straight away like I am a disease. In the guidance counselor's office, you lied to me, yet I still have tons of feelings for you and I can't stop it, they are like waves running through my body. I want to dance with you at the homecoming, I want you to carress me, notice me. You have no idea how much I love you, how much it hurts me to see you acting like something you are not. All I have over the summer is your wonderful yearbook picture, which I stare at and think of you. I am lost, I have no idea what I should do. I can't get over you, believe me, I have tried, but I just can't. 1

I wish I may I wish I might that you will love me tonight.

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Option 3, my favorite love story is Pride and Prejudice

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  • Taylor Renee
    August 31
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    =)

    I really like the emotions in this; and you did a great job giving us the escance of the character; that was great.

    I like the plot, and I think it would make a great novel, maybe a novella?

    =)

    Good job, and I like your wording style.

    Thank you so much for entering my contest, and I wish you the best of luck!

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  • Quixotic Greeters member
    August 21

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    Very well stated with heavy emotion I enjoyed reading it. Thanks for entering and good luck in all your contests Rian


  • KixiusMaximusArsus
    August 21
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    Yo continued it!!!! YAY!! I love this, its acutally true in a way to, kids always do stuff like hang out with people that are mean to them just so they can be popular. I find it so irritating. But good job! I love the way you express what the girl is feeling, and they way you word things, it makes it seem so much more real! Great job! And i can't wait to read more!


  • Kevan
    August 10
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    Oh, if only every wish for love would come true, no one would know what true pain feels like.
    You have a wonderful story. I think many people can relate to this type of thing. I can too, in a way, though some things are slightly different. Some of these things I can really relate to though, like breathing in his scent, and whispering in his ear.
    Thanks for sharing this.
    Good luck.


  • Kagamine Rin
    August 10

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    Truly magnificent.

    I've seen quite a few passages that are similar to this. But this one is unique in its own way. Beautiful. Well, word's cannot describe it but I'll try to, anyway!

    I know how this person feels. I've been in that spot many times. Many, many times. I used to have two good friends, and we are still somewhat friends, but they are both into popularity, make-up, they're preppie and whatnot. And I have been in that spot. *sighs*

    So many things change in this world, huh?


  • Rhubarb
    August 10

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    This is a beautiful piece of writing. You are so expressive and show loads of emotion. It is almost real. Infact I am in this exact situation with a boy I know, and I know just how real you made that story sound.
    Well done!


  • MizzNickJonas4eva
    August 9

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    I really like this piece. It has great emotions in it that were expressed through words very well. I like the ending when the person wishes that the other person would love them. That was really good. I wish you the best of luck in my contest.


  • KalineReine
    August 8

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    Wow, there is so much emotion behind this, I love it! It almost looks like a letter the character might give to him, or something. Interesting... I really know how this person feels more than you know. This is so sad! It reminds me of the guy I fell in love with, it was the same way... We danced together once, in junior high at one of the dances we had. It was the only time I ever felt truly connected with him and I will never, ever forget it. Despite the fact that he somewhat noticed me, I was often ignored and tossed aside. B/c I was a goth and I didn't "fit in" with anyone. He could never understand... To this day, I still love him, I really do but... It was so long ago, and all through high school I saw him and the pain other people put him through, but I was too shy to say anything to the guy. We had some mutual friends, but in the end... He chose drugs over me; over anyone. He is alone... And I have someone, but my heart will always be with him. Wow, I have no idea why I am telling you all of this, you must think I'm crazy! ^^;


  • pink polka
    August 8
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    wow, that is very realistic. I like the flow and how much detail and thought was put into it. I can visualize and imagine feeling how the character feel. It is very sad in a way. She should ask him out. Maybe if he knew her he'd like her. LOL.

    I really like all the emotion put into this, you should continue writing this.

    Even without dialogue you express feelings. Bravo.

  • Mari09
    August 8

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    I think it all sounds great I like the way it all flows. It all sounds so good it makes me sad cuz i know how much it hurts to love someone and get the feelings in return.

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