Umm... Is this what you are talking about just wanna know? so i can continue writing

A cold night on the battle feild. I am looking around seing all the people who once spoke... once laughed... and once cryed, laying dead. There bodies are frozen. I hold back my tears as i pass some people i once shared a conversation with, some people i once new and loved, but then my heart is stabbed with pain, when i see someone who i once kissed. I fall to my knees, my hands are numb from the icy cold air, tears start to fall. The love of my life is dead although i do wish to stay and to burry his body but I cannot linger I am forced to move on. So many things go through your mind when you a walk on a battle feild, like why, why must so many lives be lost for a disogreement, why can't we get along 

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  • Melissa Loves Jeffy
    August 11
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    Yes thats really true. Its stupid lives should be lost for a disagreement.


  • Shinami Tsuyoki
    August 8
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    By the title, I'm guessing this is an incomplete work and that you were asking if this is what I meant. Yes, this is tragedy. The final version should be over 400 words though, and I will expect better grammar and spelling. If I am incorrect and this is the final, please message me about it.


  • Kagamine Rin
    August 8

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    I liked it.

    This was a very good prompt. However, I caught a few erroprs. The lack of capitalizing "I". The part that struck me was "My heart was stabbed with pain when I saw the once I had kissed." That was really good, I enjoyed reading it. ^^