Ana Lee's point of view1
I’m a pure fan of the Jonas brothers and I’m going to there concert in L.A. 2
(After concert)3
“Wow they really know how to rock!” “Yah totally,” said my best friend.4
“I’m totally getting my poster signed!”5
“Yah, me too” she said also.6
Wowsa this line is sooooooooooooooooooooooooo long I wonder how long it’s gonna take to get this signed? 7
(At the signing table)8
Boy do I think Nick is hot or not? 9
HOT! 10
“Hi guy’s!”11
“Hey,” they all said. 12
“Looks like you went through a lot of sharpies.”13
“Yah we do a lot everybody goes crazy during signing,” said nick.14
“Well that dosen’t surprise me with how hot on the chart’s you are.”15
Wow he’s even hotter up close!16
“Thanks and can we get a picture all together?”17
“Sure” they all said.18
Nick made shure I was next to him and only him. I thought it was a little weird. But I let him if he wanted to. I didn’t care if he even wanted to kiss me! That would be cool if he did. 19
NICK”S Point of view.20
Wow she’s hot. Maybe I should just leave a message saying call me and add my number. 21
So I did.22
(Next day)23
Nick’s cell phone started ringing, "Superstition" by Stevie Wonder, so he answered and it was the girl from the day before saying.24
“You wanted me to call you right?”25
“Why would I leave my number and not want you t call me?”26
“don’t know maybe to joke around as I know your brothers do.”27
“Well I’m not like them, do you want to come to the bus sometime and hangout?”28
“Would I, is this a joke,”29
“NO!”30
“Ok then fine, where are you guy’s parked?”31
“Behind the mall at, never mind the store you’ll find us easy and pack a suitcase.”32
A contest entry
- Fanfiction-Several categories by Mel-the-Believer.
200 points, ended October 27, 2008, 5 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!! i lovveee nick jonas!!!
this is awesome! please tell me there is another chapter!
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You've improved
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thank you!
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but this a really good start to a story im like darkess only i want it to with kevin not nick.....maybe nick idk!
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i love the jonas brothers to but im future mrs.kevin jonas but nick is cute too.
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Interesting but kind of weird... and i wish it would happen to me! only with joe... not nick. well maybe nick... IDK!
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This is very interesting. The only problem is I don't believe I put the Jonas brothers up on the list of bands people could choose from. Other that though this is a pretty interesting story. Thanks for entering.
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if you have any idea's for the secend mesage me! lol this is my best story!
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Ahem he is mine lol yay it is about nick lol
great read
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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OMG HE'S MINE!
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"chart’s" doesn't need an apostrophe.
"Shure" doesn't have an 'h'
Describe stuff, seriously. Don't just put (after concert) or (at the signing table). All you have to do is say something like "After the concert, we approached the signing table." I mean, really, it's not that difficult.
This story is very typical and seems like something found on Quizilla (insert bloodcurdling scream). -
I don't care what others say! Nick is SO hot. But you could make it more descriptive! Just for future thoughts.
xoxo
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oh no they're EVERYWHERE!
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They'll destory us all!
They'll destory us all!
Have a good day
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ha ha ha ha lol!
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