Intro: (spoken)
There was a time I was full of wrath.
The road I walked was long and dark;
There was no light; I could perceive no end.
I knew not what kept me on the road,
But I know what brought me off... 1
Verse:
Was another day like before,
'Cept for one thing that I saw.
That miniscule splash of light,
In the shadows; shining bright.2
Chorus:
That was then, this is now.
I don't know why, but do know how.
Made a choice, turned out right.
I gave in without a fight. 3
Verse:
Following light, when in darkness,
Makes you doubt in your own rightness.
And when you turn, you see everything,
That was once hidden in the shadows.4
Chorus:
That was then, this is now.
I don't know why, but do know how.
Made a choice, turned out right.
I gave in without a fight. 5
Bridge:
First step you fight,
Second step you doubt,
Third step you see,
Fourth step you flee-
From the darkness that surrounds you.
Woh–oh.
From the darkness that surrounds you.
Ahh-ahh.
The darkness that surrounds you- 6
Chorus:
That was then, this is now.
I don't know why, but do know how.
Made a choice, turned out right.
I gave in without a fight. 7
Tag:
And carried on into the light. 8
Author notes
Some lyrics I wrote last night. Congrats if you can work out what it's about. Feel free to ask if you really want to know. 
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Well written and very lyrical indeed.
"There was a time I was full of wrath.
The road I walked was long and dark;
There was no light; I could perceive no end.
I knew not what kept me on the road,
But I know what brought me off... "
Great...
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I already commented, but I suppose I should acknowledge it is here.
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Another good effort
Once again, you offer metaphorical lyrics with a lot of depth. You say more that you write.
I agree with these other guys, it seems like it has meaning related to finding your inner light in religion, especially Christianity, like finding salvation in your darkest hour.
I noticed a misspell in your bridge - 4th is spelled "fourth," not "forth." That's all.
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Awesome song =) Planning on going anywhere with this? I like the chorus and bridge the most. Dont really have any suggestions since this is your thing, not mine, but I do like it =) Looking forward to hearing it, if you do continue!
~Hugs~ love ya bro!
~Aura
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It wasn't hard to work out, but I wouldn't have guessed it meant christianity in particular. Fight, doubt, see, flee. I'm not sure of the fight and doubt, what exactly those entail. I guess that's because you (I'm assuming you) came into christianity and I fell out of it... slight difference. Could you explain those two maybe?
Following light, when in darkness,
Makes you doubt in your own rightness -Sounded a little awkward to me, but it really depends on how you plan to sing it aloud, in which case it might not be at all. By the way, do you? My only suggestion is to reword that part, but if you like it then you like it. It's hard to have anything to really say about a song with out hearing it.
I really liked the chorus, and the tag... though I can't honestly say I really know what that means. Last line in the song I guess. Anyway, the chorus really gave me something to (think about?), and the cadence was even.
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Well, fight and doubt, in this case (it's fictional, I've been a Christian all my life, I don't remember any one moment when I saw the light, so to speak) the fight is him trying to fight against God, the doubt is him doubting he was right, and his previous convictions, the see is seeing he was wrong, and his sin, etc, and the flee, running away from that.
'Following light, when in darkness,
Makes you doubt in your own rightness'
That line gave me some trouble, it's not what I want it to say exactly, but as of yet, I've not found something else to say that rhymes with 'Darkness' I think the melody I have it works. But will see.
What the tag means? Or what the lyrics mean? Tag is just a line at the end of the song, not the chorus, not the verse, just a line sang, as the song ends. Pretty much.
Glad you enjoyed, and thanks for the comment and applause.
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Oops, forgot to applaud =)
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Sounds way cool =) I guess I'm not deep enough to perceive the real meaning. =\ Do tell! Keep up the awesomeness
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Hehe, thanks.
Hmmm, how to explain it. Haha. Basically it's about his journey to Christianity. Wanted to do it completely metaphorically.
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