Free ? Verse


I thought I'd write in free verse1

Do away with all that rhyme2

But it seems that it just follows me3

Nearly every "bunny" time.4

I try so hard, so very hard5

But no matter what I do6

When I read what I have written7

That "bunny" rhyme shows thru.8

I'll learn some more as time goes by,9

Get practice where I can10

And try to send the rhyme away11

With the council's garbage van.12

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Author notes

I know this is not strictly a story, but it does tell a story.

Writing has its problems, doesn't it?

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  • tree4yew
    August 13

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    Are the last two lines part of the poem? If they are, I think the poem would be fine without them. The reader doesn't need to be told what to think or how the poem came to be. Let it speak for itself!

    • rbruce
      September 27
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      The last two lines have been put into authors notes as they are not part of the poem. I do apologise for such a late reply. I offer no excuse as none is valid. Please accept my apology.


  • Kagamine Rin
    August 8

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    Poems! Nice.

    I feel the same way. A bunny that follows you and you cannot get rid of it... It's always there for you. Just waiting there. Good job.

    • rbruce
      September 27
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      I must apologise here, please forgive my very late reply. I am basically a writer of poetry but am trying to expand into short stories. Hence my send off on Free Verse. I thank you for your encouraging comment. By the way, the bunny is still there.