When i saw her

Verona - Elemeno P1

when i saw you in Verona2

you sat down i moved over3

pretty people but all i saw was you4

and yes it's you i'm rating5

to pick the boy your dating6

in my opinion he isn't right for you7

and if everything goes as planned8

i'll be proud to be your9

man i promise to treat you well10

head over heels end about now11

she likes listening to punk rock12

mellincollin and the black flot13

and she smiles when she sees me14

intoxicated by your company15

splendid16

lady17

lazy18

sunday afternoon19

good fortune at the bar20

Verona Vero-oh-oh-na21

when i saw you in Verona22

you sat down i moved over23

pretty people but all i saw was you24

and i remember being tounge-tied25

as i tried to say good-bye26

i was ready to fall in love with you27

now that everythings gone to plan28

i'm proud to be your29

man your beauty lights up my world30

this is how i met my girl31

she likes listening to punk rock32

mellincollin and the black flot33

and she smiles when she sees me34

intoxicated by your company35

splendid36

lady37

lazy38

sunday afternoon39

good fortune at the bar40

Verona Vero-oh-oh-na41

Verona Vero-oh-oh-na42

Verona Vero-oh-oh-na43

Verona Vero-oh-oh-na44

Verona Verona Verona45

she likes listening to punk rock46

mellincollin and the black flot47

and she smiles when she sees me48

intoxicated by your company49

splendid50

lady51

lazy52

sunday afternoon53

good fortune at the bar54

Verona Vero-oh-oh-na55

Verona Vero-oh-oh-na56

Verona Vero-oh-oh-na57

Verona Vero-oh-oh-na58

Verona Vero-oh-oh-na59

Verona Vero-oh-oh-na(nanana)60

Verona Vero-oh-oh-na61

Verona Vero-oh-oh-na62

Verona Vero-oh-oh-na63

I sat in the Nightclub, lights surrounding me, music pumping, I felt slightly intoxicated. I waited for her to arrive.... Alexia, my best friend. You might think its weird for a 18 year old guy to have a best friend and harbour no "intimate" intentions, But what i felt for Alexia went above and beyond "intimacy" I was straight out in love with her. Unfortunately for me she had a boyfriend.64

i ordered another drink from the bar and returned to my seat. a few minutes later, amongst the pretty people dancing in the club I saw her.65

Her Aurburn hair flowed over her shoulders and onto her Black dress, He ruby red lips smiled like she knew something no one else did, but most of all her eyes, her beautiful piercing blue eyes glistened as she looked around, finally her eyes settled on mine. It was at the moment i noticed he was with her... Adam, her boyfriend. i scowled the guy was a jerk but for some reason she just hadn't seen it yet.66

"hey Lukas, Verona is pretty pumping tonight huh?" she said melodically, referring to the nightclub67

"Hey Lexi, sure is... Hi Adam" i muttered his name 68

Alexia sat down and Adam walked over to the bar, i moved closer to her and whispered gently69

"Adam's not right for you" 70

"Your drunk" she giggled71

"no, not particularly... i'm comfortably numb" i smiled72

I looked over at Adam and growled lowly. he was flirting with the female bartender. Alexia noted my face and turned and looked over at Adam as well. She sort of frowned then whispered back to me73

"he's probably just trying to get a deal on drinks or something"74

"Hey i finished the complitation of Mellincollin that you wanted.. I brought it with me" I grinned changing the subject and pulling the Compact Disc from my jacket pocket75

"Thanks!" she smiled back at me, taking the Disc and placing it in her bag. I looked down but i was surprised when her hair brushed my face, and her lips gently rested on my cheek "You're an awesome friend"76

"friend" i repeated wishing it was more.77

"Oi! what do you think your doing!" Adam yelled at Lexi, he looked angry78

"I was thanking Lukas for burning a CD for me Adam" she said non-chalantly, as if she was used to his anger.79

"Whatever, you're a slut like the rest of them, come on we're going now" he growled grabbing Alexia's rest forcfully80

"Hey mate, don't touch Lexi like that, she's not your lap dog" I said raising my voice as i sat up81

"oh buzz off mate, you're not her type, stop trying eh?" he mocked82

"No he's right Adam. Noone touches me like that! I'm sick of your constant insults. It's over. Buh bye" she said pulling her hand free of Adam's. 83

Adam walked away muttering under his breath. I turned and faced Lexi again.84

"You okay?" i asked gently brushing my fingers across the wrist Adam had grabbed.85

"I'm fine, you were right. He's not for me. Sorry he put you down like that, I'm sure your don't like me like that, we've been best mates forever" she laughed86

"yeah, we have"87

"I should probably go home, Sorry i didn't stay long"88

I couldn't open my mouth to say goodbye, i couldn't bear to let her leave.89

I looked down again, my fingers slipping away from her wrist. It was now or never. If i didn't tell her now, next week some other guy would have noticed her. My heart began to pound as i took a deep breath90

"I'm in love with you Lexi" i said a little fast and quietly, i knew she had still heard me though because a distinctive gasp slipped from her beautiful mouth.91

"in love, with me?" she questioned92

"head over heels" i frowned, knowing she probably didn't feel the same, knowing i was going to get rejected, i closed my eyes and waited for a response. What surprised me was the form it came in. 93

Her lips pressed against mine and i immediately began to kiss her back, nothing had ever felt more right. My hands cupped her face and finally we pulled apart94

"I love you too Lukas. You should have told me earlier"95

"You know now Lex" i grinned resting my lips on her head.96

"How bout you spend tonight at mine?" she suggested.97

I closed my eyes again and invisioned waking up next to lexi and spending a lazy sunday with her. My heart warmed and i opened my eyes again98

"sure, shall we?" i said standing.99

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Not quite finished, and un edited. but yeah i'll fix it up shortly. My daughter is being a ratbag!!

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  • SquirrelRaiders
    August 27, 2008

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    I like it!

    I liked the imagery and the description from the point of view of Lukas and how he sees Lexi... you can just tell how he loves her. I really like this story and I wish there was more to it almost... that's not a negative comment in any way, but this is a story that could develop into an entire novel of the whole development of how Lukas and Lexi became friends to the point where Lukas loves her and can still be her friend without anything physical between them when he thinks he doesn't have a chance because Lexi is always with another man... it's just a really great story line! You could do a lot with this piece.

    • eelyah21
      August 27, 2008
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      thanks :-)

      It was for a contest, so i might look into developing it abit more, will be something new for me writing from a males perspective!! thanks so much for your comment!! it means alot

      • SquirrelRaiders
        August 27, 2008
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        Male Perspective!

        I forgot to say that's another thing I admired here--very bold. I have hedged on the idea of writing a spin-off novel of the one I am posting bits of (Pain Brings Back My Life Again) of another character that you will meet soon (Kyle) but I have been hesitant to start writing it because I"VE NEVER BEEN A MAN!!! I don't know how they think or work or anything! SCARY! But as far as I can TELL, you did a good job here and I applaud you for that. Very bold, and very gutsy, and very well done. Good for you!

        • eelyah21
          September 2, 2008
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          hehehe

          Thanks yeah i was just talking to my BF about writing from a male perspective and how hard it would considering i have never been a man lol. But i will just develop that i guess and ask males lots of questions about how the think/feel about things hehehe, i like asking stuff like that. OOOOoooOOO i cannot wait until you put another bit of your novel up!


  • Infectious Insanity
    August 11, 2008

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    this is awesome so far. the storyline is great, maybe a little bit of editing will help?
    some of the paragraphs skip to the next bit of the story a little too fast...
    but great work, i think this story is really captivating.
    =]
    thank you for entering my competion

    Me.
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