Verona - Elemeno P1
when i saw you in Verona2
you sat down i moved over3
pretty people but all i saw was you4
and yes it's you i'm rating5
to pick the boy your dating6
in my opinion he isn't right for you7
and if everything goes as planned8
i'll be proud to be your9
man i promise to treat you well10
head over heels end about now11
she likes listening to punk rock12
mellincollin and the black flot13
and she smiles when she sees me14
intoxicated by your company15
splendid16
lady17
lazy18
sunday afternoon19
good fortune at the bar20
Verona Vero-oh-oh-na21
when i saw you in Verona22
you sat down i moved over23
pretty people but all i saw was you24
and i remember being tounge-tied25
as i tried to say good-bye26
i was ready to fall in love with you27
now that everythings gone to plan28
i'm proud to be your29
man your beauty lights up my world30
this is how i met my girl31
she likes listening to punk rock32
mellincollin and the black flot33
and she smiles when she sees me34
intoxicated by your company35
splendid36
lady37
lazy38
sunday afternoon39
good fortune at the bar40
Verona Vero-oh-oh-na41
Verona Vero-oh-oh-na42
Verona Vero-oh-oh-na43
Verona Vero-oh-oh-na44
Verona Verona Verona45
she likes listening to punk rock46
mellincollin and the black flot47
and she smiles when she sees me48
intoxicated by your company49
splendid50
lady51
lazy52
sunday afternoon53
good fortune at the bar54
Verona Vero-oh-oh-na55
Verona Vero-oh-oh-na56
Verona Vero-oh-oh-na57
Verona Vero-oh-oh-na58
Verona Vero-oh-oh-na59
Verona Vero-oh-oh-na(nanana)60
Verona Vero-oh-oh-na61
Verona Vero-oh-oh-na62
Verona Vero-oh-oh-na63
I sat in the Nightclub, lights surrounding me, music pumping, I felt slightly intoxicated. I waited for her to arrive.... Alexia, my best friend. You might think its weird for a 18 year old guy to have a best friend and harbour no "intimate" intentions, But what i felt for Alexia went above and beyond "intimacy" I was straight out in love with her. Unfortunately for me she had a boyfriend.64
i ordered another drink from the bar and returned to my seat. a few minutes later, amongst the pretty people dancing in the club I saw her.65
Her Aurburn hair flowed over her shoulders and onto her Black dress, He ruby red lips smiled like she knew something no one else did, but most of all her eyes, her beautiful piercing blue eyes glistened as she looked around, finally her eyes settled on mine. It was at the moment i noticed he was with her... Adam, her boyfriend. i scowled the guy was a jerk but for some reason she just hadn't seen it yet.66
"hey Lukas, Verona is pretty pumping tonight huh?" she said melodically, referring to the nightclub67
"Hey Lexi, sure is... Hi Adam" i muttered his name 68
Alexia sat down and Adam walked over to the bar, i moved closer to her and whispered gently69
"Adam's not right for you" 70
"Your drunk" she giggled71
"no, not particularly... i'm comfortably numb" i smiled72
I looked over at Adam and growled lowly. he was flirting with the female bartender. Alexia noted my face and turned and looked over at Adam as well. She sort of frowned then whispered back to me73
"he's probably just trying to get a deal on drinks or something"74
"Hey i finished the complitation of Mellincollin that you wanted.. I brought it with me" I grinned changing the subject and pulling the Compact Disc from my jacket pocket75
"Thanks!" she smiled back at me, taking the Disc and placing it in her bag. I looked down but i was surprised when her hair brushed my face, and her lips gently rested on my cheek "You're an awesome friend"76
"friend" i repeated wishing it was more.77
"Oi! what do you think your doing!" Adam yelled at Lexi, he looked angry78
"I was thanking Lukas for burning a CD for me Adam" she said non-chalantly, as if she was used to his anger.79
"Whatever, you're a slut like the rest of them, come on we're going now" he growled grabbing Alexia's rest forcfully80
"Hey mate, don't touch Lexi like that, she's not your lap dog" I said raising my voice as i sat up81
"oh buzz off mate, you're not her type, stop trying eh?" he mocked82
"No he's right Adam. Noone touches me like that! I'm sick of your constant insults. It's over. Buh bye" she said pulling her hand free of Adam's. 83
Adam walked away muttering under his breath. I turned and faced Lexi again.84
"You okay?" i asked gently brushing my fingers across the wrist Adam had grabbed.85
"I'm fine, you were right. He's not for me. Sorry he put you down like that, I'm sure your don't like me like that, we've been best mates forever" she laughed86
"yeah, we have"87
"I should probably go home, Sorry i didn't stay long"88
I couldn't open my mouth to say goodbye, i couldn't bear to let her leave.89
I looked down again, my fingers slipping away from her wrist. It was now or never. If i didn't tell her now, next week some other guy would have noticed her. My heart began to pound as i took a deep breath90
"I'm in love with you Lexi" i said a little fast and quietly, i knew she had still heard me though because a distinctive gasp slipped from her beautiful mouth.91
"in love, with me?" she questioned92
"head over heels" i frowned, knowing she probably didn't feel the same, knowing i was going to get rejected, i closed my eyes and waited for a response. What surprised me was the form it came in. 93
Her lips pressed against mine and i immediately began to kiss her back, nothing had ever felt more right. My hands cupped her face and finally we pulled apart94
"I love you too Lukas. You should have told me earlier"95
"You know now Lex" i grinned resting my lips on her head.96
"How bout you spend tonight at mine?" she suggested.97
I closed my eyes again and invisioned waking up next to lexi and spending a lazy sunday with her. My heart warmed and i opened my eyes again98
"sure, shall we?" i said standing.99
Author notes
Not quite finished, and un edited. but yeah i'll fix it up shortly. My daughter is being a ratbag!!
A contest entry
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270 points, ended September 28, 2008, 5 entries
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Comments
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I like it!
I liked the imagery and the description from the point of view of Lukas and how he sees Lexi... you can just tell how he loves her. I really like this story and I wish there was more to it almost... that's not a negative comment in any way, but this is a story that could develop into an entire novel of the whole development of how Lukas and Lexi became friends to the point where Lukas loves her and can still be her friend without anything physical between them when he thinks he doesn't have a chance because Lexi is always with another man... it's just a really great story line! You could do a lot with this piece.

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thanks :-)
It was for a contest, so i might look into developing it abit more, will be something new for me writing from a males perspective!! thanks so much for your comment!! it means alot -
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Male Perspective!
I forgot to say that's another thing I admired here--very bold. I have hedged on the idea of writing a spin-off novel of the one I am posting bits of (Pain Brings Back My Life Again) of another character that you will meet soon (Kyle) but I have been hesitant to start writing it because I"VE NEVER BEEN A MAN!!! I don't know how they think or work or anything! SCARY! But as far as I can TELL, you did a good job here and I applaud you for that. Very bold, and very gutsy, and very well done.
Good for you!
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hehehe
Thanks
yeah i was just talking to my BF about writing from a male perspective and how hard it would considering i have never been a man lol. But i will just develop that i guess and ask males lots of questions about how the think/feel about things hehehe, i like asking stuff like that. OOOOoooOOO i cannot wait until you put another bit of your novel up!
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this is awesome so far. the storyline is great, maybe a little bit of editing will help?
some of the paragraphs skip to the next bit of the story a little too fast...
but great work, i think this story is really captivating.
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thank you for entering my competion
Me.
J'adore My Chemical Romance
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