She overwhelmed my mind and ensnared my heart with just a single heavenly smile. Every time that beautiful smile of hers was sent my way, I melted. One smile and I was hers and only hers. No other girl could captivate me like she did. No one else could possibly hold so much control over me. She was one of a kind. She was amazing. She was my best friend. But she never knew how much she meant to me.1
I loved Ariel more than anything. She was the sun that brightened my life and the stars the sparkled above me. I worshipped everything about her. I noticed little things that no one else cared to. Then again, I knew things about her that no one else did. I was her best friend; confidant. I was the one person she opened up to. Despite the radiant smile that always shone across her flawless fair skin, she hurt.2
Underneath that long raven hair, cherry red lips, and flawless skin was a girl in pain. She tried so hard not to let things bother her, but there were some things that were just too much for even her to handle. That was what I was for. She could hold up that perfect little facade as long as I was there. As long as I was her shoulder to cry on and her arms to rest in, she would be fine.3
As long as she was fine, I supposed I would be too. Sometimes comforting her was just so difficult though. Every tight hug and gentle brush of the lips across my cheek wore down my defenses and brightened my mood. Every time she smiled at me, my heart skipped a beat. Her smile was contagious. It made me smile too. Every little thing she did affected me. That was the problem. I was hopelessly in love with her. Ariel? She didn't feel a thing for me. I was just the best friend. All those sweet little gestures only temporarily filled my heart with joy. Hours after she left, the high would leave and reality would set in.4
I was the best friend; nothing more, nothing less. Every time she laid in my arms, I was in heaven. But as soon as she left my house, I was forced to accept the horrible truth. She didn't love me in the way I loved her. After spending hours crying into my chest, she would merely dissapear from my house, leaving me to mope.5
Ariel cheered me up without even trying. An hour spent with her was like a year of perfectly sunny days. The grin on my face was irremovable. At least until I left my litlte dream world.6
Anticipation pumped through my veins as my cell phone rang, interrupting my moping. I didn't have to look at the caller ID to know who was calling. Ariel had her own special ring tone on my phone. The opening notes to 'I'm Wishing' wafted through the air. Snow White was her favorite movie. It always had been and it probably always would be. Unbeknownst to her, I knew that she loved that old classic more than any movie. I was the only one who knew that, though. All her other friends just assumed her favorite was whatever was in.7
My hand scrambled to grab the phone.8
"Hello?" I asked, slightly breathless from the scramble.9
Gentle sobs echoed through the phone. Panic coursed through me as I worried over the cause of her sobs. I really hoped she was okay.10
"Ariel?" I asked, the worry becoming quite apparent.11
"H-he left," she stammered dazedly.12
I could almost see the tears running down her pale cheeks from those beautiful emerald eyes. I hated seeing- or hearing- her cry. I hated to see the girl I loved so much so distraught.13
"Who left?" I pried gently.14
I was really only clarifying. I knew exactly who she was talking about. Her father had been threatening to leave for years. He and her mother had been fighting a lot the past three or four years. It had really been taking its toll on her. She'd been afraid of him leaving ever since the increase in fighting began.15
"M-my d-dad," she choked out, her voice breaking.16
I didn't pry anymore. I knew all I needed to know to comfort her. No words would make that pain go away, but maybe, if she just rested at my place a little while, I could help ease that pain.17
"Where are you?" I asked, fishing my keys out of my pocket.18
"Corner of Date and Birch," she replied.19
A frown crossed my face. Glancing out the window, I confirmed my fears. It was pouring outside. Outside in a rain storm was no place for her to be.20
"I'm on my way."21
She was drenched and shivering by the time I picked her up. Her long raven hair clung to her slender body as blended tears dripped down her face. No words were said and no looks were exchanged. I merely herded her into the passenger seat of my car and drove her back to my apartment.22
Moping could wait. As much as she unintentionally broke my heart, I just couldn't let go of her. I would be there forever. My door would always be open for her as would my heart. Despite the unrequited love, she was my angel. I could only hold on to that fragile hope that one day she might look at me the way I looked at her.
Author notes
She Will Be Loved- Maroon 5
moonwriter and I coomented on Fallen Angel
A contest entry
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Wow, this story is so touching. I love the details - it really makes you feel like you we there. Very sweet! Good luck and keep writing!
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Thanks for entering this in my contest. Sorry it took so long to comment on this. There are a lot of entries in the contest and I've been busy.
Sweet story. I like stories like this. I loved what the guy was doing for the girl to make her happy just because he loves her. Great descriptions. Everything flowed well. Take care and keep up the good work. -
This story is very sweet. I like what the guy did for the girl. Doing all he can to trying make her happy, because he love him, and asked for nothing in return. Good job! I liked this story and its desriptions.
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Sweet
It was a very honest read. I liked how you used very simple phrasing for a well-known emotion but you made it yours! We all want a piece of that love in the sky, don't we?
My only qualm: the use of long raven hair twice. It wasn't needed a second time.
But the way everything played together was just so sweet!
Good Job,
Jay
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luvin' it!
this is a great story! I was hoping there was more to the story but it ended so perfectly! Usually I wouldn't read a story that sounded sad and stuff. But this really caught my attention. P.S. My name is Ariel
yeah I know ironic
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A wonderful story
I think you could really go somewere with this it has a lot of potentual. All you need to do is expand your characters a bit more and make an interesting villan perhaps? Anyways great write I love this.
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This is well written and very discriptive.
the stroy line is good, although i think it could have been a little more dramatic. however, its a great story. = ]
thank you for entering my competition, good luck in the contest!
Me.
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It was alright, but i was expecting something much bigger to happen. Grammar and diction was alright as well.
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Awesome
This story is great. I like the way the main character was kind to Ariel even though she didn't love him back.
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Remarkable
I love the agape love that defines the main character. Everyone man and woman alike should have that Godly, unconditional love for their all their neighbors; especially the one they claim as their one true love.
The conflict is straight and to the point; a child can understand what is taking place. Remarkable.
beginning: 3, language: 3, plot: 4, ending: 5, dialog: 3, characters: 5.
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Very well written and thought out story, most of it is his feelings for the girl which expresses the undying love! Maybe you should have a dramatic flashback of the begining of thier friendship.
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Well done
This was a short piece, but very well written and it matched the song pretty well... thanks for the entry!
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