New Breed

Swallowed in heat of bodies. Bare flesh covered in salts, sweats caressing contours of strangers. Soaked in pulsing chants, clothes mold like second skins. Vibrations surge, close eyes, savage melodies roll over. Ceiling pours light, catching eyes, breath. 1

Suffocation. Limbs intertwining, covering mouths, collapsing lungs, turning bones into frail sticks splitting, keeping you standing. 2

Look up. Illuminating your savior, lips and teeth to the microphone, screaming melodies that saved. Sounds erupt from inner chambers of throats.3

In that swarm of sweat and tears, you've all become a new breed.4

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Option 1 - 100 words

Just a quick note, although this may appear to be the happenings of an orgy -- it's not, I promise you. It's actually about my experience everytime I see my favorite band in concert (Brand New) and in the crowd, it's mayhem. Everyone is pushed up against someone you've probably never become acquainted yet (prior to the concert, it makes it a lot less awkard if you have introduced yourself, considering they're going to be on top of you for the majority of the night.) And during the concert, although your covered in sweat (most of it not even your own), although you feel like you're about to faint, it makes it so worth it to see your idol (the band's lead singer, Jesse Lacey, a true God himself) take that stage and sing the words that have really saved your life on several occasions. With everyone singing along, moving together, you do really become a new entity, a new breed.

Now, why couldn't I just say that all to begin with? Please, you know that would be way too easy.

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  • Melancholic Smile
    August 6, 2008
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    I must admit I was alightly confused when I read it at first - the words were describing something really well - but I couldn't work out what! Now, after reading your explanation (which is also really well written by the way) it now makes perfect sense! Good choice of words and very descriptive. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck!