Eternal (9)

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Drayden teased her mouth with his tongue, then, kissed her deeply, he wanted her to need him so badly. When he touched her ear and kissed the side of her neck, he realized he'd found her weak spot. The slight electric tingle he felt emanate from her body told him that this was one of her greatest erogenous zones. He spent minutes there, licking and kissing and sucking on her earlobe and neck. The sweet purring contented sounds that rose from her throat told him he was lighting her fire. He could feel her press upward toward him and the monster within him grew. 2

He sat up, still straddling her and ripped his shirt she was wearing to reveal her perfect breasts. The nipples were standing taught and erect, begging to be kissed, so he obliged. His tongue traced little circles of temptation around one, circling ever inward toward the peak. When he flicked it with his tongue, he heard her intake of breath. With his right hand, he squeezed her other nipple and she arched toward him. He took her breast in his mouth and sucked. His left hand was in her hair, tangling it around his fingers and pulling her head back while his right was toying roughly with her other breast. He could feel her excitement and he enjoyed knowing he was the one bringing it to her. 3

He slid down her stomach, kissing her beautiful skin, trailing little kisses mixed with tiny bites down her body. Both of his hands were caressing her breasts as he slid his head down between her legs. He nudged her thigh with his shoulder and she opened her legs farther for him. His tongue darted out and flicked her where she wanted his touch most. Drayden could read her thoughts, sense what she wanted most and he was glad to indulge. She was wet, wanting him to give her pleasure, begging him to lick her, touch her, caress her, possess her. 4

He reveled in the fact that he was the one in control. He would decide when to give her what she needed. He licked, and sucked, and stroked and brought her almost to climax before he moved his head and began to kiss her thigh. He heard her thoughts scream No! Give it to me, and he smiled as he bit into her thigh to take a little of her blood. The animal in him wanted more, but he could contain it. 5

He pushed himself up on her and kissed her again. She writhed under him, pressing her sex against him. She was begging for him to take her, to give her the release she needed. He used his thighs to coax her legs apart and he felt her wetness against his throbbing cock. He wanted her, too, but wasn't willing to give in to her yet. He teased her more, stroking himself against her, but not penetrating, not going where she wanted him to go. He could hear her thoughts, she wanted him to take her now, her body was quivering with desire just for him.6

He raised off of her just enough to let the head of his shaft slide into her opening. She thrust upward, wanting all of him, but he matched her and pulled away. It was all he would give her now. The head of his swollen member slid playfully in and out of her, driving her crazy as he licked her neck and thrust his tongue in and out of her ear. 7

To Mirra, it seemed like an eternity. She wanted him to give her release so badly, she craved it. Her nails dug into his back and she grabbed his ass to try to force him all the way into her. She wrapped her legs around his body and used them to pull him toward her, but Drayden was strong… and in control. He teased her for what seemed like hours to Mirra, taking her almost to the top before backing off. Drayden knew when she was at her peak again, he smelled her pheremones and finally gave in to the urge. When he did, the force he used to plunge himself into her was inhuman. 8

When Drayden drove his entire shaft into her, Mirra's body exploded in pain and release. It was a climax like she had never felt before. With her eyes closed, she saw little white stars explode on the back of her eyelids and she felt herself drifting upward as in a dream. Waves of orgasms shook her body and she felt her insides pulsing and throbbing against him and he drove himself in and out of her. She came and she came and she came. Drayden wouldn't stop. He thrust himself into her over and over, each time harder and deeper than the last. 9

Mirra's climax was over, but she was still quivering and shaking and Drayden wouldn’t stop. He was hurting her and liking it. She wanted to tell him to stop, the pain was intense, but she couldn't. Something else was rising in her again. She felt it coming like a dark wave. Her nails dug in the flesh of his shoulders and she smelled his blood. Oh, God, Mirra thought, I'm coming again. Drayden pounded against her harder, deeper, and faster. His body was a machine, ever demanding more from her. The crescendo in Mirra's mind and body drew to a peak once again, and she knew this would be the mother of all orgasms. He drilled himself into her and the pain was as delicious as the blood. She felt herself bite his neck at the second his fangs pierced her throat. Their bodies were one. Thrusting, sucking, pounding, bleeding, taking in something she had never known could've existed. The pleasure and the pain became one and the experience was ungodly. Never before had she felt such ecstasy. Her mind swam and she wondered if she even blacked out for a minute from the sensations flowing through every single cell in her body. There was no way anything on Earth was ever supposed to feel this perfect, this magnificent. 10

Drayden lay on her, his entire body spent. He felt his fangs retract and he licked her wounds with the last remnant of his strength. He was amazed at how he'd lost himself in her. He smiled. She was his. He felt the love radiating from her, and reveled in the fact that the little aftershocks of orgasms that rattled her body were all because of him. He lifted his head, looked deep into her eyes and kissed her deeply once again. She wrapped her arms around his body and clung to him. He felt her gratitude and her smile in her kiss. 11

Drayden was in the shower when she joined him. The satisfaction she felt from his lovemaking was still evident in the way she looked at him. He smiled at her. He had forgotten how good it felt to be needed and wanted. The human side of his emotions hadn't been tapped in far too long. The only needs he had felt for centuries were ones of blood and survival, not ones of emotion. It was strange, but he liked being put on a pedestal by her. 12

She snatched the shampoo from his hands and lathered up. "You realize of course, that if I'm going to live here with you some things are going to change, don't you?" She playfully wagged the bottle in front of him. Drayden wasn't sure he liked what she said, but he did like what she did next when she went to her knees for him in the shower.13

Drayden was dressed by the time Mirra was done in the bathroom. She came out of the bathroom nude and stood there in front of him. "Do you have any idea what I'm going to wear tonight?" she asked.14

In truth, Drayden hadn't thought about it. Last night hadn't gone exactly as planned and the one dress he had bought for her was ruined. The look on his face was answer enough for Mirra.15

She pillaged through his closet, amazed to find that all his clothes were basically the same. She found a black suit jacket, put it on, followed by her black high heeled shoes. She looked amazingly sexy to Drayden. The V cut of the coat revealed the innermost portion of her breasts all the way down to her navel and the back of the jacket left just enough to the imagination. 16

"Let's go shopping!" Mirra's eyes sparkled with mischief as Drayden grabbed for his wallet. 17

As soon as they entered the mall, Drayden realized his mistake. He'd never been shopping in a mall and never wanted to. What had he been thinking? Mirra grabbed up various lotions, perfumes, and hair care products and placed them on the counter. Drayden paid in cash and they moved on to the next store. It was all so mundane. He hated it. 18

The next store she drug him into was a lingerie boutique. At least he could deal with that. He even picked out a few items for her. She surprised him by flashing a sexy red see through number at him from the dressing room. He liked what he saw. 19

When she tried to take him into another store, he begged off and handed her his wallet. Mirra understood and let him go. She was having fun. She had never been able to just go into a store and buy whatever she wanted and damn the price. It was nice to shop without restrictions. The snob lady at the counter looked down her nose at Mirra wearing the red bra under a man's suit coat and looked at her like she was a common tramp. Under ordinary conditions, the look from the lady would've made Mirra self-conscious enough to slink away, leaving the store in shame, but not anymore. She stood tall and confident in her six foot tall frame and ordered the woman to find her a black dress. The woman complied and led her to that section of the store and handed her what she wanted. Mirra had the woman wait on her, handing her dress after dress in the fitting room until she was satisfied. She left the store wearing a short lacy red dress.20

Outside, Drayden did manage to lose the credit cards in front of some likely young men getting out of their car, so the trip to the mall wasn't a total waste. He set out to search for his prey and was back long before Mirra was done shopping. He called out to her telepathically and she came out of the mall shortly carrying a great deal of packages. She danced toward him holding her arms out, weighted down with her shopping bags, and twirled. He smiled at her vibrance. She looked genuinely happy and he was proud of making her that way. He hugged her tightly and helped her put the bags in the car. 21

As they drove, he tried to explain some of the things she would need to know to survive. Things had changed tremendously in his lifetime. No longer did one simply need a pair of fangs to survive. Now, one needed cunning and a complete knowledge of forensics and police work to escape detection as well as stealth. Drayden enjoyed his game of cat and mouse with certain detectives. He liked to toy with them, but that was something he kept to himself. He would never let Mirra know all there was to him. That was another thing he had learned-never trust someone completely. Always keep some things to yourself. Always have a place that is solely your own to retreat to. Never let them know your secret sleeping place. Drayden talked to her about the dangers of credit cards and certain types of money market accounts and how they could be traced. He did tell her the banks he preferred and shared with her how easy it was to get some extra cash by gambling and doing other things. He warned her of the dangers of certain blood borne illnesses these days. He would teach her the smells, he promised. "Will they kill us, too?" she asked innocently.22

"No, my dear, but the bad blood will make you feel about like you did on the night your body purified itself." 23

Mirra shuddered at the thought of herself in the bathroom retching and wanting to die. She would be sure and not drink any blood that would cause her to feel like that again. 24

"So, my dear, I expect you thirst?" Drayden asked.25

"Yes," she grinned at him. "Who have you chosen for me tonight?" 26

In truth, he hadn't made any plans for her, but she looked at him so expectantly, he smiled and lied to her face. "The couple for tonight are a pair of drug dealers who sell rat poison dope to children. They are responsible for many deaths over the years. It should be a pleasure to rid the world of vermin like these two." 27

"I'm so glad that you understand me. I don't think I could bring myself to kill someone innocent just to survive. I love you all the more for being like me. It's like we're super cops or something, huh? The bad guys can't hide from us, can they Drayden?" She smiled at him and he knew he would have to go on with this charade for quite some time with her. It amazed him that she had no recollection of last night. He knew it would devastate her when she found out how many innocent lives she had taken in just one night. That reminded him that he would have to find out the name of the girl child who had escaped last night. She had seen too much. It was likely that if she told the truth to the authorities, they would just blame it on the trauma of losing her family, but some chances were not to be taken. They might admit the girl to a psycho ward or a certain detective might lend some credence to her story. Either way, Drayden didn't want to take the chance of being identified. Police sketch artists were very good these days and he didn't want his and Mirra's likenesses on the nightly news.28

Drayden smiled back at her. "No, they can't my dear. No, they can't." As they drove into the poor side of town, Drayden reached out with his mind to hear the thoughts of people in their houses. He was listening for a home with only one couple in it. After a few blocks, he found just what he wanted. "We're here, mi cherie. Let's rid the world of some druggies29

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  • tonialoise
    November 10, 2008

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    I normally don't read a chapter out of order but for the magic list points I read this one.

    I wasn't confused at all with the action (except for why they wanted to lose some credit cards. were they hers) it's pretty stand alone so I didn't need to know who the characters were before and why they were doing what they were doing. Though it might have helped to know before the fact that they were both vampires.

    I noticed a change in point of view from Drayden to Mirra in the middle of the love making, normally this would bug me but here it wasn't too bad.

    The only thing that was a little strange was the sudden jump in scenes. Normally there's some sort of break in the paragraphs to show a scene change, but there wasn't here. I could still follow it, but just something to think about in the future.

    It is quite well written and this one chapter does peak my interest to read more. Well done!


  • gerifitzsimmons Greeters member
    November 6, 2008

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    This fine piece of creativity held my attention until the end.



    Terrific writing, normally I can only read so much of sexual activity before it becomes so repetitive it’s boring . This fine piece of creativity held my attention until the end.

    I suppose it could be edited down, so as to tighten it up but I’m not going to go there . I’m just not qualified in correcting a piece of erotica. Not enough experience .

    When you got to the sex combined with feeding, you really blew my mind . That is some heavy-duty wacky idea—I loved it.

    You give the impression earlier that Drayden is already involved with detectives and at the end of this he seems to narrow it to one. Chapter lag on my part?

    Apparently, though he might tell her he doesn’t kill the innocents, he plans to hunt down the child? And he did allow her to indulge in that feeding frenzy in the first part. So he's a liar .

    When he dropped the credit cards where the young men could find them you lost me. When I thought about it and read it over, I figured somehow the cards drew them to a place where he could safely attack them and sate his hunger? The writer could put a bit more in here so it’s clear on a first read.

    Otherwise the plot is moving along nicely.

    I’m enjoying this story. Please keep posting.

    Geri

    language: 5, plot: 5, characters: 5.


  • Fizbop
    November 4, 2008

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    I really liked this it was very invovled I'm not sure what to comment on about this it's just so much really great writing . I liked it.


  • Andy Stephenson gold member
    November 4, 2008

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    Well,

    Mirra, when she's not crazy, is a romantic and an idealist. She wants to be a supercop or perhaps a superhero. Drayden just seems to be a survivor. Is the couple he is choosing for them actually druggies? Drayden's not entirely truthful, is he? I would think that the blood of innocents would be healthier. I guess he's going to go after the girl that got away.

    You need the ending quotation marks on the last sentence.

    This was a hot chapter. If he is telepathic, shouldn't she be telepathic as well? Is his telepathy stronger than hers?

    Andy


  • enchantress
    October 29, 2008

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    This is very good. It's good to see that he will let her shop after what he did. I would like to think Mirra would eventually remember what had happend to her or Drayden would at least break down and tell her.
    Good job.

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • jenn28
    August 28, 2008
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    WOW. I don't know what to say. You've amazed me again with your awesome writing (: I couldn't stop reading and now it is 5:52 in the morning. By far my favorite story on all of story write.

    paragraph 9 - Wow this had me speechless (:

    Keep it coming I'd love to read more.

    Jen x

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • eyeambaldman
    August 3, 2008

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    'graph 3: The nipples were standing (taut) and erect,

    'graph 5: Wow!

    'graph 8: POV slippage!

    'graph 9: Damn! This guy is going to town now! LOL

    'graph 10: So, they bit each other? Basically they sucked each others' blood during sex? That's some whacky stuff! Damn cool, too!

    Hmmm...quite interesting that Drayden lies to her in the end. So, now the reader wonders if the couple Drayden finds are really drug dealers. Nicely done. We have some excellent conflict here. He's keeping secrets from her already. I wonder about this. He spent years searching for her, protecting her, and yet he's not completely honest with her. In fact, he's learned not to completely trust anyone. Should make for some interesting drama later, especially if/when Mirra discovers that she killed innocents.


  • Bells Kelly
    August 2, 2008
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    well done.

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