Every child has heroes, Superman, Batman, Cat Woman, and such, but my hero is different. Just like every hero though, my hero had strengths, weaknesses, secret identities, and powers. My hero taught me many things, but one of the most important things he taught me was that nobody was perfect. Not even him.1
On Sundays, Orval Sutton was a Reverend at Crooked Creek Baptist Church. All of the members of the church adored him and his family. They treated us, his grandchildren, as if we were celebrities. It was nice really. "There goes Orval's granddaughter." Someone would say. "Look how cute they are." Another would boast.2
Grandpa had his fair share of not so secret identities. On Sunday's he was a Reverend, on some days he was a golfer, but everyday he was a Grandpa. Grandpa had his strengths and weaknesses. He could golf an amazing game on a Saturday afternoon, and then give a preach on Sunday the knocked the audience off their feet. He could fix any bad day and turn into a spectacular one. 3
One of Grandpa's weaknesses was his diabetes. Grandpa turned it into a strength though, he did not moan around and complain about it, he got up and did stuff. He tried hard to be the person he was before the diabetes. Grandpa did not die of diabetes, he lived with it. 4
Heroes had powers and Grandpa had many. One was his singing. He could cheer up the saddest kid by singing them a song. He had a cheerful, old voice, and the last time I heard it, even though it was hoarse and cracked some, it was still the most beautiful thing I ever heard. He sang with his heart, and his heart sang with him.5
Batman's costume included a black cape, so did Grandpa's. Grandpa wore fancy black suits for speaking, weddings, and funerals, with a black cape like Batman's. Grandpa's costume was not complete without his smile, and when I close my eyes I see that beautiful smile. Superman saved Lois, Spiderman saved Mary Jane, and Grandpa saved me. 6
A hero is role model, a helping hand, a friendly smile, and my Grandpa is an example of all of that. This story is not about how perfect he was, but about how he was just one of us, an exceptional one of us. He had his strengths, his weaknesses, his battles, and went through things that everyone goes through. But he managed to stand tall and proud throughout it all, and thats what matters. Grandpa said "Don't sweat the small stuff, because it's all small stuff", and he was one Reverend who lived by what he preached. I am proud to be his granddaughter, and I want him to proud to be my Grandfather.7
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This piece is lovely, and very emotional. I like how you maintain the theme of comparison between your grandpa and the comic book heroes, especially the reference to the girls in the heroes' lives.
It seems not many people noticed the rule for your author's notes, so I'm not so fussed on that. I struggled at first to see the success in this story, but I started to understand towards the end.
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very emotional and strong. Thanks for entry, rian.
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A very well written emotional piece of writing. Your love for your grandfather shines through in this story. The way you have compared him to fictional heroes is really sweet. However, the story doesnt really fit into any of my options for this contest. So, you wouldnt have a chance of winning even though I like your story. But you could always enter another story as I have allowed two entries per person
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This was truly a touching piece, I felt to cry. It reminded me of my grandmothers they were my superheroes. I prefer real people with true strengths. I really lie this piece I know your grandfather will be proud of this piece.
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cooool
i had a grandpa that was very similar to the one your explained. it is amazing to think that people like grandpas are just like everyone else, like teachers, and celebrities, and parents. it blows my mind to know that everybody was my age at one time, and it makes it easier to see the light in people, i think. i'm sure yours would be delighted to read this tribute to him, without a doubt.
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Aw, this is very nice! It's more of an essay than a story, but still very sweet! I loved this line in P4, it's very powerful: Grandpa did not die of diabetes, he lived with it.
He sounds like an amazing person and I'm sure he's in a much better and happier place now!
Thanks for sharing this with me!
I do have to be honest though, this won't have a chance of winning anything in the contest, as it's too much of an essay for me. You can enter something else if you want, but I won't DQ it, because I still think it's sweet
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Very touching. I love how you compared him to superheroes.It's a beautifully written piece. Great emotion. Very down to earth.
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wow
i really like this
this was amazing
it was in depth
you definitely
described how your grandpa was
and made him the hero
of everyone who read this
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This is such a nice piece, I thought it was so beautiful and sad. I thought that the way that you described him was lovely too, he sounded like the grandpa that everyone wanted. Loved it!
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A touching piece, and brings up valid points on how humanity should try it's hardest and make the most out of what they have. There were several small typos and the occasional grammatical mistake, but overall this was a fine piece of literature.
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This was really great! Sweet and yet sad - a good combination. The piece tied together and the emotion showed through well. Good job!
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Bitter sweet! I loved it
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This was so awesome, I really enjoyed this piece and you wrote it so nicely
It all went together and I enjoyed it sooo much lol.
The first line captured me which made me want to cry on and the last line was so awsome.
hope u win the contest. Rewarded 4
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This was a lovely piece of work about a boys grandpa. You worte this with a loving idea in mind and passed it onto the reader. You captured the essence of the boy and the grandfather well. I enjoyed this very much.
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This is nice. I too have diabetes. I was recently dignosed of it. My husband tho has been diabetic for over 30 years.
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(sorry I didn't say anything to your message before..)But anyway. That story was so sweet. It was really nice to read something about your relationship with your grandfather. It was so- truthful and honest. My favorite part was in paragraph 6, the last sentence: "Superman saved Lois, Spiderman saved Mary Jane, and Grandpa saved me." I really wanted to cry at that part, because it was a line I felt I could really relate to. The last line stood out very well, and closed it all up nicely and cleanly. Great job.
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Your story had a great tone to it, and it was awesome to read about how great your grandpa was. You did a fine job comparing elements of superheroes to elements of your grandpa's life. It was a great read, and it flowed nicely. Thanks for sharing it.
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This was very honest, a great tribute to your grandpa, it was really refreshing to read something positive. we all need people who are good examples to us, and its really neat to see that they do indeed still exist. great write, this was beautifully done.
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Nicely toned and I liked the sentiments expressed here. The love you have for your grandpa shines through and he does sound like an incredible person. Technically there are several elements that need addressing but that's what drafting is all about. Don't be put off by any constructive criticism, it's intended to help us all improve as writers, good luck with it.
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a better world
Knowing that there are men out there like your grandfather makes the world a better place for me. You did an incredible job with this story. Your grandfather should be proud, thanks for sharing his story with us...
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p1 Colon ( : ) after heroes.
p1 comma before and after though
p1 has instead of had. You start off in the present tense so you want to stay in the present tense. Don't use had. Had is past tense.
p1 is instead of was. Once again, you're speaking in the present so use the present. Don't switch back and forth between the two tenses. You'll get yourself confused.
Can';t remember which paragraph, but it should be the most beautiful thing I had ever heard.
This was cute, but filled with errors in punctuation and tenses. It was very sweet and a great little thing on how your grandpa was your hero.
One thing is, though, there aren't any metaphors. Metaphors compare things without using like or as. Example: His is a sly fox.
It was nicely written though. Good job and good luck in that contest.. Rewarded 8
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I liked this........
Very evocative, shows the kind of appreciation that comes from seeing people's good points, a very rare commodity these days. This was obviously a very happy write, and there was a roundedness and maturity that belies your age.
Technically, there were a few errors in punctuation, and I'd bet that if you went through it again, you'd find them and be able to correct them; if not, I'm willing to go through it for you, all you have to do is ask.
i think it's a very good entry for the contest, because your portayal of your Grandpa is one that made me smile. (I have two grandsons, but since they live more than 300 miles away, I rarely see them).
As I say, I'm happy to give you feedback, but be aware that I am a bit harsh sometimes; don't hesitate to tell me when you feel I am being unfair, and we can discuss it.
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