Concrete Covered Lips

kissingthelipless: Hey, good afternoon1

xxscreamoutxx: Oh...it's you2

kissingthelipless: Ha did I say something to offend you?3

xxscreamoutxx: No I just thought you were someone...4

kissingthelipless: different?5

xxscreamoutxx: No just my Mrs.6

kissingthelipless: I'm sorry love but I'm no Mrs.7

kissingthelipless: I'm just simply Miss8

xxscreamoutxx: Oh really...that changes everything9

kissingthelipless: and how does that make a difference?10

xxscreamoutxx: Every conversation we every had this year11

every conversation we tried to have this year12

made me want to be with you forever, but even when I'm near you I feel dead13

some how I can't explain in words, but in letters the things I want to say14

I can't be near you because you're you, but my heart always skips a beat when you're there15

It's only in these secret chat rooms where my soul allows us to be together16

So do you want to take a shot at it?17

xxscreamoutxx:...???18

kissingthelipless: I hardly know what to say... 19

these situtions make my stomach knotty and my mind kind of blurry20

you have no idea how I want to say yes21

I spent an entire year filling and emptying out a heart that is so fragile,to the point of no return22

Every conversation we had every had fills the corner of my shaken mind23

so vivid like the photographs we took that day at the beach, jones beach24

do you remember that day? do you remember what was played?25

xxscreamoutxx: I remembered that day. You were wearing beige and your hair was perfect,it was in waves26

Your skin was golden and sunskiss, it had reminded me of summer. 27

and those eyes of yours were rounder...I could see are whole future in them28

kissingthelipless: But do you remember what was being played?29

xxscreamoutxx: Someone had a radio...? No I believe there was a band...YES there was a band!30

it was an indie band...south pacific sound. I remember because their sound was so rash,like Mraz31

but of course you loved them anyway and than everything went red....32

xxscreamoutxx:...everything went red...33

kissingthelipless: Don't you remember what actually happen that day?34

xxscreamoutxx: No I don't...I won't...[remember]35

kissingthelipless: We had a fight, a silly teenage fight36

You told me I was a prick for listening to such crap called music37

I was enraged, i couldn't believe you could be such a fool38

I called you a poser a wanna be wristcutter, the king of the scene39

and with a flash of lighting you struck me, you...hit me40

the lights went out and I thought I was dead41

All I could remember was the alarms going off in my head42

How can someone I love so much put me through so much pain?43

kissingthelipless:...How could you?44

[silence...no one is typing]45

xxscreamoutxx: I don't know what to say...46

Sorry would never be enough...47

kissingthelipless: So let us just leave it at good afternoon...48

kissingthelipless signed off49

xxscreamoutxx: I think I need to get some help...50

xxscreamoutxx signed off

Author notes

This is something new for me...I have no idea why a chat room convo came up to me...its kinda funny and cliche...but that is what a teenage relationship is pretty much all about.

I'm thinking about making this a series of chat room conversations...between kissingthelipless and xxscreamoutxx. Maybe eventually I will make this a set of short stories.

So if anyone has any ideas...I would love them..I'm also looking for a better title for this piece too.

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  • Tsubasa
    July 30, 2008

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    You gave me a new respect for chat room stories. I really loved this, you made everything so vivid and interesting. I couldn't stop reading. It was... beautiful. I think you should continue, if you want. I really enjoyed it, and I want to know what happens between these two. I like your characters, I like the story. I like everything. Thanks for writing! Hope your days are bright.

    • bloved
      July 31, 2008
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      Thank you so much for the feedback! I am really glad that you enjoyed it. I wanted to write a story that pens point the teenage experience.

      I am actually going to contiune with this story with an introduction.

      Thanks again for reading.