The Gum Wraper

Hello, my name is Cyril Huntinghawk. I'm 14 years old and I love my life. I live in Ontario and during the year we make the 14 - 16 hour drive to Rolling River, Manitoba. A local reservation to the town of Erickson.1

School had just ended and I basically spent my days playing Xbox live. Whereas I am known as 'Operation Emo'. After awhile we decided we wanted to go to a visit to see our family in Rolling River, although I didn't want to stay there(simply because I knew I was going to be there for the rest of the summer), but I did want to visit. So on the night of leaving I packed my things and stayed up pretty much all night so I could sleep most of the way there. Didn't work out too well.2

I was in the car wide awake as we travelled through Ontario, now. If you haven't been to Ontario, it's basically a giant forest. 3

Now, we stopped at Long Lac to eat some food. Where there is a subway, I made my order(meatball marinara ), then I spotted my friend Wade Baxter(real names here, lol) we crossed each other and spoke, he was going to Thunder Bay for a basketball thingy or another.(I really don't remember)4

As our trek continued my thoughts were constantly driven to a girl, then I quietly in the back of the van shed a few tears. Knowing how hopeless it was, although I listened to my iPod loudly and I looked outside enjoying the scenery. 5

We stopped at a town whose name I forget , we stopped at a store to get something good to eat, and move our legs. I went in and bought a bag of chips, and a bottle of pepsi. My grandma got bubble gum, after around 5 minutes I asked for a peice of gum and she gave me the bag to grab one(she was driving). I wasn't picky I just simply grabbed a random one.6

I opened it slowly as I looked outside and watched the landscape pass by. When I got it open I took the gum and enjoyed it, it had this little comic strip of a funny inside. And a 'fortune' at the bottom of it. The little strip was actually quite funny, whatever it was. 7

The fortune(to my realization) said 'A loved one misses you' and I almost immediately thought of her, I frowned as I stopped chewing, I thought to myself..8

'No... It can't be.. Can it?' By the time this thought was over I found myself sitting completely still, and I asked for a few more gum to see if any were the same. I opened them quickly to find that there were no other 'fortunes' just these facts children wouldn't know.. 9

I'll never forget that little gum wraper, it gave me alot of hope. Proves the saying, "big things, come in small packages". 10

I still think about that gum wraper, even though that was almost a month and a half ago..

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  • Rukia Kuchiki
    October 19

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    I don't give good comments.. >.>

    Butt, I liked thiss. Did you think of Matt or Amber when you got the wrapper?
    I save mine too.. but my dad Ryuk hates them lying around everywhere... >.>

    Anyways.. good story.
    There, I read something of yours. xD

    • xD It was Amber of course!

      Thought I didn't mention when I got back from Manitoba I was super-duper emo. xD


  • xMoonlightxDreamsx
    July 30, 2008

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    Most of the phrases/words in parentheses are un-needed... Except for the first one which would be fine without them. Also, in paragrapgh 7 (by storywrite)the "whatever it was" isn't needed in my opinion, because it makes the reader think that the narrator didn't understand it, but still thought it was funny.

    Other than that, this was pretty good. It would be great if we could see more into Cyril's thoughts, especially after the fortune. Unless you plan on adding more parts to this.

    Anyway, I really liked it, it was a cute story.