I sat on the beach the sand itching my bare legs, tears furiously falling from my face, what a night. I heard footsteps in the grass behind me, my heart began pounding.1
“June, what the hell were you thinking… something could have happened to you” My best friend Damien yelled, his voice a mixture of frustration and worry. I relaxed a little but turned to hide my tears, he couldn’t see me like this.
“June, why did you run away from the party?” 2
“You really want to know Damien? I’ve watched you, fawn all over Jessica for months now. For goodness sakes man, she doesn’t even know you exist”
“Why the heck would that bother you June… who I fawn over shouldn’t worry you” he answered softly
“Are you kidding me? I’m in love with you, you brain dead imbecile!” I yelled back at him
Maybe it was the copious amounts of alcohol infiltrating my system that made me outburst like that, maybe it was the pent up frustration yearning for Damien I’d suffered the past few months, either way I regretted it straight away.3
Without thinking I stood and ran down the dark beach the waves crashing on the sand in time with my thudding heart, what the hell had I done?
I felt an hand grab my shoulder and turn me around, I looked up into Damien’s light green eyes and saw something strange, something I’d never really seen from him before… ever4
“I love you too June, I have forever” his hand brushed a strand of hair from my face
“What about Jessica?” I asked
“I don’t know what made you think I was fawning, superficial high school drama queens just don’t appeal to me”
I smiled, my skin warming up with the blush of Damien’s admission hitting me where it affected me most, my heart.
Slowly Damien’s face moved closer to mine my eyes still slightly open took in how beautiful his face looked as it basked in the glow of the moonlight, finally my eyes closed and our lips met, my stomach filled with butterflies as we kissed, it was just as I imagined my first kiss to be, out of this world amazing, and with Damien.
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I know it seems a bit cliche.... but that is my speciality!
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Pretend or Personal?
I was just curious if this was based on your personal first kiss experience or a fictional first kiss.
Very good though! Kissing is hard to write about because it is so intimate it's hard to walk the thin line between cliche and cheesy and unbelievable, etc. etc. But I think this works very well! The only part that confused me was at first Damien says why should it matter who he fawns over like he WAS fawning over Jessica and then he says he wasn't fawning over her... maybe he should be a little more vague or 'brain dead' at the beginning when she is talking about his attentions towards Jessica so it doesn't conflict so much with what he says later. It is the perfect ending to a great love story! (OR the perfect beginning!)
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oh and mostly
I was mainly getting him to play along with the "fawning" thing to make the girl jealous lol. but i'll probably edit that and make it mre clear
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definitely not mu\y first kiss
Although i wished that maybe it had of been. My first kiss was lame in the grand scheme of things. I was drunk. i always thought being best friends with someone first would rock. but that cos i a cliched hopeless romantic
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whoops lol..... option 3 :-)
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Option number please?
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sorry
option 3 :-)
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