When Darkness Comes

Darkness surrounds me.
It follows me everywhere I go.
I turn a corner,
beneath me, it shows.1

It talks to me sometimes,
threatens my very life.
My anger, my sadness,
dissapears with a knife.2

I look like a human,
but you look like my scar.
My wound never heals,
for it has been too far.3

I can't just give up.
all my goals and dreams.
But I will always cut my wrist,
and I'll always watch it bleed.4

My eyes begin to flutter,
I think I cut too deep.
Everything is turning dark,
but I won't go to sleep.5

The darkness surrounds me,
hurdling in my bed,
it doesn't stop,
until I am found dead.

A contest entry

I revised it into a poem, not a song.

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  • try2changeme
    January 11

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    I liked it a lot, it showed how much pain you have, and how cutting helps still.. and i know this isnt in relevance to the contest or the poem, but i absolutely adore this background.. lol.. good job, anyway


  • Boondock Saint
    September 22, 2008

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    This was a cool song. i write song lyrics to. please finish these lyrics. i love song lyrics cause they tell stories that can only be told through music. P.s. I hate rap and love rock so any lyrics by me that you read are to rock music.


  • Poisonous Love
    August 12, 2008
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    That was AWSOME! I liked it. Good job!


  • Hisana
    July 29, 2008
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    cool song. finish it

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