It hurts. I makes me feel that I'm about to be torn into two. My eyes only look at one thing. My mind only thinks about it. Heart pounds slowly, painfully. This is not like what I thought it was going to be.....Yet when I stare....feel him near me....It feels better, then more longing. More heart break... Never ceasing, never leaving me alone. Just ready to pounce on me agian. No where to go but to him. There is only one light in that pure darkness. Why do I deserve it? Why do I deserve this feeling? Of happiness and saddness at the same time? Like light and darkness have combined into one thing... 1
Love...
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Love is an endless cycle.....
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Aww so sad. I love how you compare light and dark in this, and how you put so much emotion into this piece! It was beautiful! Great job!
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if i learned anything its this... LOVE SUCKS... yeah thats all i got to say lol, srry i dont have a helpfull comment
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This is a really good description of love or maybe of falling in love, once you are there in a relationship and both loving each other the emotional rollercoaster does calm down a bit i promise!! It does have a couple of spelling/grammar mistakes but it was written well with some good descriptions in there. Thanks for entering and Good Luck!
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That is a very accurate description of love. I really like it!
It makes sense, in a strange way, two things can come together in such a twisted way. Love makes us feel good, but it also makes us very bad at the same time... Well said!
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Wow! This is SO you lily! I love it!
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Seems like your riding a roller coaster.
Sometimes love is like that. It is hard to take hold of your thoughts and be in charge of your emotions. The trick is to let your thoughts guide your emotions rather than your emotions guiding your thoughts. When you love someone, there are many emotions to be experienced. Hopefully, those you love will love you back.
Good little shorty. There were a couple of typos.
Andy
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Thanks for the comment and yes, definitely, I went through quite a roller coaster ride with this guy I liked throughout the 8th grade school year. I am sorta shy and so I couldn't get his attention that easily, not to mention he was a total jock and popular and cute. He had had many previous girlfriends I am sure, cuz he had girls hanging all over him.
I really really liked him and I still do, but I know he is taken and I am a nobody in his world. So, that's what his shorty is about, I feel so happy and wonderful when he's around, but then, I found out he was taken, I cried whenever he was around. Anyway, I have gone through a lot with him, and I barely even knew the guy! Thanks for the comment anyway!
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Don't sell yourself short.
You can try talking to him, let him know that you'd like to be his friend because you think he's cool. Start from there and see what happens.
A good and easy way to get over your shyness is to say 'hi' to everybody and try to learn their names. Soon they'll know your name and you'll become popular. Then people will hang around you and want to be your friend. You might run into a few who make fun of you or something at first, but as you gain confidence, they'll back off. This is the way I became popular in high school.
Here is a story that might inspire you a bit:
http://storywrite.com/story/38160
It's called 'The Shy Girl'
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Thanks for the advice and I will check out the story.. .. Thanks again
~Lil~
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