My ears are ringing and my vision is blurry. My chest feels as though it is on fire, as though it is about to grow legs and attempt to jump out of my chest; at the same time it feels as though it wants to sing one of my favorite choruses from my favorite song. I hate how this feels but I enjoy this feeling. This feeling makes me sad. Happy. Mad. Excited. I doubt I'll ever be able to explain this pain/pleasure but when I look in your eyes, everything just feels so right. I love you, Annemarie.
Author notes
Option 1 - 100 words
Well I'm sure that you can tell what emotion I explained but yeah, it was love. Love is such a hard emotion to explain and that's what I tried to make it seem like. Love can be painful and love can be the best thing that's ever happened. It just depends on what happens.
I made this a letter that one of my characters wrote to the girl her loves.
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You have described how the emotion of love feels really well here and packed a lot of emotion into 100 words well done! There is a slight mistake in the line: I hate this feels but I enjoy this feeling. I think there should be a 'how' in there? I hate how this feels but enjoy the feeling? Anyway i overlooked this because i enjoyed reading it. I really like sentences like that which contradict themselves because an emotion for example is so hard to explain that it can feel like a bit of everything. Does that make sense?! Anyway, a good piece of writing and thank you for entering my contest, Good Luck!
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Thanks...and let me go fix that mistake, lol
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Your welcome!
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Good job.
I really liked it. It was good. Awesome job. I loved how you put emotion into the story. What really caught my attention was how you added the part about a song to make it more realistic. =] -
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Thank you
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