Tuesday at 3:50p.m. on August 20, 19851
Jamie sat on KITT's hood as she watched the people looked at her and then turned their heads away. The police were closing off the area, and they told the people to go home. Michael talked to the detective. They walked over to her.2
The detective smiled at her. “Ms. White, we found your briefcase and Mr. Miles called us to let us know what was going on.”3
Michael sat beside her. “He was trying to find us in the crowd.”4
“Thank you, detective,” Jamie said as she smiled.5
“You two had the guard going.” He paused and played with his fingers. “By the way are you dating?”6
Michael and Jamie looked at each other. “Just a cover,” they said.7
“Yeah, all right, there's nothing else. You two have a nice day.” The detective walked away.8
Jamie rose as Michael followed. He opened KITT's door, she got in, and Michael handed her the briefcase. She ran her fingers through her brown hair.9
“Jamie, are you all right?” KITT asked.10
“I'm fine, just a bit confused.”11
Michael opened the door and hopped into his seat. “What are you confused about?” He touched her hand.12
She turned her head and looked into his baby blue eyes. “You care about me?”13
He placed his hand on her neck as his thumb stroked her flush cheek. “I do.” He leaned towards her.14
Jamie's hand caressed his face and for a moment, they gazed in each other’s eyes. Then she closed her eyes, his warm breath touched her face. He came closer to her lips as a beeping sound entered their ears.15
“Michael, Devon is calling,” KITT said.16
Jamie turned her head away as Michael sighed and took his hand away from her. He pushed the buttons on the control panel above him with his right thumb.17
“Hello, Devon and always your timing is quite good.”18
“KITT told me, that Jamie is safe and sound.”19
Jamie leaned over and waved to Devon.20
“She’s right here,” Michael said.21
“Thomas called me and wants a meeting here at the Foundation,” Devon said.22
“Good. I've some questions to ask him.”23
“Then I will see you both soon.” Devon faded out from the screen.24
Michael turned the key and put the gearshift into drive. He drove out of the parking lot. Jamie put her briefcase by her feet and relaxed in her seat.25
Michael's hands rested on the steering wheel. “What are you confused about?” He looked over at her. “She's asleep,” he whispered as he brushed back her hair.26
“Bonnie has updated my data banks about Jamie's EAS drugs. Would you like me to run a medic scan on her?”27
Michael looked at KITT. “Go ahead.”28
“She's quite remarkable, Michael.”29
“She sure is, KITT.”30
They headed back to FLAG.31
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If you find any nits in this chapter, please give me examples so I can understand what you are trying to tell me, Thank you
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It has been a fun trip with lots of excitement
This reads like a conclusion—is this the last chapter? It has been a fun trip with lots of excitement and nice visible characters.
What plans do you have for the manuscript? Are they going to start the program up again so you could offer it to the producers? I’m a bit lost as to what market you can offer a Fan Flick too.
A few things to look at:
Jamie sat on KITT's hood as she watched the people looked (looking) at her and then turned their heads away (before they turned their heads away.)
Michael sat (down) beside her.
“You two had the guard going.” ? (going what? )
Michael opened the (opposite) door and hopped into his seat.
Best of luck. What will you start posting now?
Geri
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hello
Hi Geri,
Thank you so much for reading this chapter. This is not the last chapter of the novel, just last of this section.
I write in sections, having dyslexic it is easy to write the story in sections.
There are 12 chapters left.
One reason that I am writing fan Fiction, to help me improve my writing. Trying to see my strengths and weakness too.
One of my goals would be to get this novel publish in the market, but since these copyright characters. I don't think that would happen, unless I became the next Steve King. LOL
My other writing project is the Temple of the Sphere and that is all mine! LOL
Being in the world of Temple of the Sphere, I need a break, and I go to write Fan fiction. It is just fun writing when you know the Hero is going to win.
Thanks for reading,
Lynn
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woah, flashback! I loved the KITT car. Your writing is very detailed. Right thumb? Played with his fingers? Neat. The way you describe the characters makes them seem very real, quirks and all.
BTW, I believe KITT stands for Knight Industries Two Thousand, if memory serves.
In para 14 "flush cheek" should probably be "flushed cheek" though.
Long live the KITT car. I so had a Michael Knight poster in my room when I was 12. ^_^
. Rewarded 8
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Thank you
Thanks for reading this chapter. I am done writing this Fanfiction novel and have all the chapters posted on the site. I hope that you will checked them out.
At 12 I was into the car than the driver. Those I wanted a poster of Michael and KITT, my mom said no. LOL
Lynn
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Thoughts & Opinions
My only misunderstanding is why is the character's name in full capitalization if it is just a name....
like Kitt and not KITT
I don't know that just feels a bit 'off-standish' to me. But other from that, this story is just begging to the question, "What really happened?". Rewarded 6
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Thank you
Thanks for the review.
This is Fanfiction novel about the the TV show Knight Rider.
As the show and in the 5 five novels spelled KITT in uppercase because he is a computer.
If you want to know what happened read the past two chapters.
Lynn
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