The front of my head starts to feel lighter.1
The burning inside I can feel getting brighter.2
I'm telling you now it's time for alarm.3
The burnings it's moved from my chest to my arm.4
I feel it now, I'm starting to shake.5
It's getting worse, am I going to break.6
Stop! concentrate! block it all out.7
These are my friends, whats this about?8
They laugh, they point, they think they are smart.9
I'll show them, I'll rip out their heart.10
I tense my fists, I'll hold it in.11
It seems to me the only way I can win.12
Author notes
100 word, short poem.
A contest entry
- An options contest with a difference for some big points! by Melancholic Smile.
900 points, ended August 6, 2008, 16 entries
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What do you think. all veiws welcome.
Comments
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This is a good write, there are a couple of words i would have changed about to make it flow just a little better but overall you described anger well here and i could feel the powerful emotions in a short piece. Good job and thanks for entering my contest! Good Luck!
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This was very interesting Tony. I liked the way you wrote it and the shortness of it seemed to enhance the value. Great job!
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