~~my angel~~

love you so much!!!!!!!!1

ill spend forever wit him2

hugs him and lets a tear fall down her cheek3

he pulls her away and tears her heart apart4

piece be piece her heart becomes nothing but a past memory to him5

nothing but the past6

gone and away from his memory7

surprise on her face8

she looks at him astonished9

whats going on?10

what are you doing?11

he looks away12

like i wasnt there13

never there14

the blood gushing from my chest15

slowly losing conciousness16

becoming dizzy17

falling to the floor18

shock still marks my face19

eyes as wide as the full moon20

disbelief21

the floor disappears and i fall22

a blinding light23

ahead of me and waiting for me24

my fall slows to a steady hovering25

i realize a pair of arms around my waist26

i look to see who or what it was27

still cant see28

a halo and a pair of great white feathered wings identifies him29

my angel30

lifting me up 31

stopping my fall to death32

he pulls me close 33

embracing me 34

i lose my breathe35

too good to be true36

he kisses my neck and guides me to the better...

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  • mastersokka
    July 28, 2008
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    sweet. your so talented when it comes to theses things

    beginning: 4, language: 3, plot: 4, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 3.