love you so much!!!!!!!!1
ill spend forever wit him2
hugs him and lets a tear fall down her cheek3
he pulls her away and tears her heart apart4
piece be piece her heart becomes nothing but a past memory to him5
nothing but the past6
gone and away from his memory7
surprise on her face8
she looks at him astonished9
whats going on?10
what are you doing?11
he looks away12
like i wasnt there13
never there14
the blood gushing from my chest15
slowly losing conciousness16
becoming dizzy17
falling to the floor18
shock still marks my face19
eyes as wide as the full moon20
disbelief21
the floor disappears and i fall22
a blinding light23
ahead of me and waiting for me24
my fall slows to a steady hovering25
i realize a pair of arms around my waist26
i look to see who or what it was27
still cant see28
a halo and a pair of great white feathered wings identifies him29
my angel30
lifting me up 31
stopping my fall to death32
he pulls me close 33
embracing me 34
i lose my breathe35
too good to be true36
he kisses my neck and guides me to the better...
What do you think?
Comments
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sweet. your so talented when it comes to theses things
beginning: 4, language: 3, plot: 4, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 3.

