(Poem) Untitled--for now--

He irritates me all the time.1

So much that it should be a crime.2

And yet he's always on my mind.3

My thoughts and feelings so entwined.4

When I am mad it brings him joy.5

I may as well just be a toy.6

And yet his voice just sounds so sweet.7

So full of wonder and deceit.8

I don't see how I love him so.9

Or how he always seems to glow.10

He makes my temper go sky high.11

And so I wonder, why, why, WHY?12

I'll close my eyes and count to three.13

And then I'll know what's wrong with me.14

I just don't want to feel this way.15

I want it to just go away!16

But still I feel so warm inside.17

And I know that it won't subside.18

So now I lay my head to sleep.19

And still my heart is his to keep.

It sucks, but I still like it... Do you? Be honest lol.

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  • alena austin
    July 19, 2008
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    awesome

    The inevitable merry go round that is love.... I think you hit it dead on.

    Keep writing!

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • Melissa Loves Jeffy
    July 19, 2008

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    Yes I do like it. Its different from your usual writing. Glad your back Liz. I missed you. I hope you start coming on storywrite more often. Cause thats the only time I get to talk to you. Welcome back!