As the sun rises, I think of you1
As the sun sets, I think of you2
Everytime I talk to you, the sun is high overhead in the sky3
burning bright down on me, as I take in its warmth4
Whenever you whisper sweet words to me from across the blanketed sea, I collapse and melt like a snowman in a summer's sun.5
You make me feel magical like no other person can6
When I cannot talk to you, my heart sinks into despair and you leave, making me feel alone and afraid7
The sun sets, making me feel dead inside8
Then, once again, as the sun rises, I talk to you, as my heart is uplifted into the soaring heavens.9
I don't know why I feel like this10
It seems I cannot live, breathe, or think without your sweet and tender words calming me down11
When you tell me we are just friends, I understand, but inside, my heart splits in two like a twig snapping underneath the weight of a passerby's foot12
I love you, so richly and so tenderly13
That I think this must be magic14
Taking its toll on the forgotten ones15
Please take me into your arms and just love me, and make the sun rise again, my heart mend again, and let the magic do its trick one more time.16
Author notes
My shoe size is 8
I am a girl
A contest entry
- Give me your best work! by Shadowed Phoenix.
750 points, ended August 7, 41 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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~sigh~
Love poem that is written so well, it flows nicely and I can totally identify with the subject matter. Awesome!
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i like this
it was very deep
i loved it
it was detailed and descriptive
keep it up
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Beautiful Kat!
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A concept that seems to be used a lot it seems; the friends in love thing. Was this a poem or more of an abstract/freeform type becasue with the short broken up lines and short paragragh formation it gets a little confusing. The poem wasn't bad, but it wasn't anything spectacular either. Since that's what I'm looking for in my contest. Thank you for entering.
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