A ball of crystal, resting on pale finger tips, held the image of a girl. Really she was a young woman, standing on a stage. Her outfit was simple yet fanciful. She wore a deep blue skirt that just barely covered the tops of her feet. Over a billowing off white poets shirt, she wore a black psuedo-leather vest that glittered slightly from the inconspicous sequence that had been dispersed over it. The music playing behind her was soft and haunting, powerful yet tired. She began to sing and the man watching nearly dropped the delicate crystal.1
"How you've turned my world, you precious thing.2
You starve and near exaust me.3
Everything I've done I've done for you.4
I move the stars for no one."5
As she sang she walked across the stage and sat on the make-shift steps. She watched the stage as if waiting for him to appear.6
"You've run so long.7
You've run so far.8
Your eyes can be so cruel9
Just as I can be so cruel."10
The man's mis-matched eyes watched, feeling the pull of his own heart to go to her yet he resisted. She stood again but remained rooted to her spot.11
"Though I do believe in you...12
Yes I do, live without the sunlight.13
Love without your heartbeat.14
I can't live within you."15
Gently, caustiously, she took a few steps toward her audience.16
"I can't live within you."17
The man set the crystal down and turned to leave but the girl's voice stopped him.18
"I'm sorry Jareth...for everything. Please forgive me," He smiled slightly and whispered to the girl's image.19
"I already have Sarah. I already have," Then he left, leaving the girl in the spotlight and her image fading in the crystal.20
Author notes
Ok so this might or might not be obvious depending on if you've seen the movie but this is my first Labyrinth(my spelling may be wrong) story that I managed to finish. Please let me know how to improve it...
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Very well written
I really like your style of writting. I'm looking for someone to write a Labyrinth fanfic with me through email. You can email me at dramatiger88@hotmail.com if you are interested. -
great
OMG! You know about the Labyrinth?! You are my new best friend! I've met very few people who've heard of it, let alone seen it. I loved this! -
I love that move and I thought this was a great fanfic of it. I liked how you kept the detail to a minimum it really enchanced your story. Also I commend you for your ending. Sometimes people don't know when to end a good story, but you do.
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I'm a little confused about this story. You say in your author notes something about a movie - apparently I've never seen this movie, because this story doesn't make much sense to me.
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I like it. It's very good. I didn't know Jareth was his name.
excellent write.
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