Securing the bonds around his wrists she slowly moved down to his ankles, tying both of them to each end of the bedposts. Biting her lip softly she looked at him with nervous eyes. She’d never done this before and was worried that she could hurt him more then she should. She didn’t want to cause permanent damage.1
He smiled softly, nodding to her that it was all right, that he wanted it as much as she did. Smiling wickedly she gave him a look that said ‘you better behave.’ Crawling up his body was a site worth seeing. She looked so sweet yet she had this glint in her eyes that said she could be deadly.2
Picking something up from the side of the bed she shoved her worn panties into his mouth, using a strip of something else to tie it around his head, keeping it in place as a makeshift gag. 3
Hopping off the bed she moved over to a drawer, pulling it open and pulling out something silvery. He could see the glint from the light reflecting off the blade. A shiver of anticipation ran along his spine as he saw the knife in full view. He couldn’t wait for her to use it on him.4
Kneeling back on the bed she smiled that wicked smile and straddled his stomach. “Do you know what I’m going to do with this knife, pet?” She asked him in a soft purr, looking down at him with sinful eyes. Shaking his head he looked up with wide eyes, unable to answer her.5
Leaning down slowly she rested the cool flat surface of the knife against his shoulder, pressing her lips to his ear, whispering softly. “I’m going to drag it along your skin, barely touching, barely sinking it in so you can just feel it. Not even leaving one mark.”6
Slowly she flipped the knife so the sharp edge was against his skin, sliding it slowly from his shoulder, down his chest in small waves. Putting almost no pressure on it so all he could feel was the cold glide of the steel. It was torturous and he just wished she would cut him already.7
“Do you like that, pet?” Whimpering softly he tried to move, tried to tell her he wanted more with just the look in his eyes. Laughing softly she flicked her wrist in one quick movement. The knife slashed at his skin, leaving a small harmless looking cut on his chest, just above his right nipple.8
The gag that she had placed in his mouth stifled the groan that fell from his lips. He could feel the sting as it sliced his skin and the small trickle of blood that subsequently fell from the cut. His eyes opened wider as she lowered her head to the cut, her small pink tongue flicking out to lick the small amount of blood from his wound.9
Licking her lips, she looked like a cat that got the canary. It was one of the sexiest things he had seen. Laughing softly she showed him the knife, a small drop of his blood shimmering against the silver colouring. He wanted more of it. He wanted more of anything she would be willing to give him.10
Before he could do anything more she slashed the blade against his chest again. The sharp edge sinking further into his skin then before, it left a deeper cut, more blood flowing from this new cut then the one before. It made him arch, as much as he could, against the feeling of the cool blade slicing his skin.11
She smiled wider and repeated this motion several more times in quick succession. More cuts appearing littered across his chest. Each one making him moan and squirm. He was so hard; he wanted to fuck her so much. Just push her back onto the bed and slam in her over and over.12
But the torture wasn’t over yet. Slowly moving down his body she traced the tip of the knife over his stomach, stopping barely an inch from his dick. There was no mark but he could still feel the trail of it down his body.13
A small almost innocent smile spread across her lips as she moved the knife away from his skin, holding it just above his thigh. “Do you want me to do it, pet?” 14
Nodding his head fiercely was all he could do. He hoped it was enough. He felt the sharp sting of the steel biting into his flesh, carving a straight line into his thigh. It was more intense then the other cuts, being on a more sensitive area. It felt so good though. He barely had time to moan out his pleasure from that cut when he felt the sharp sting on his other thigh.15
The pain that usually would have resulted from the cut felt like a welcome. It wasn’t so much pain as it was pleasure. The sharp sting of it. The small trickle of blood. It was all so good, so intense, so… Perfect.
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- Storywrite's Next Top Story Creation - Final Round by whichcraft.
800 points, ended August 12, 2008, 3 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Honest feedback would be good.
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....sexxi, eh?
one of the most sexxiest pieces i've read or should i say that it's more kinky than anything. i'm new to the site. think u know how to be a story mentor of some kind?
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ahh.. tasteful and not too bad. It was sexy and kinky... full of wonderful descriptions and passion. I think we all have a little sadist/masochist in us
This was well written and I'm sorry it took me so long to finally get around to reading! Well done! Hot hot hot 
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I like it! I don't know how to explain but I really like this!
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I loved the danger in this peice. The erotic fashion that sparks my darker side and makes me wish that I could only be as passionate as you are in regards to this kind of writing. It is brilliant ^..^
write more please....
Blake ♣
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First of all, congratulations on making it to the final round! This is the contest for the best of the best - which is why I'm going to be a bit more thorough on my comments. Good writers can always use thoughts and suggestions, right?
This isn't a genre I typically read, to be quite honest, but I admire the way that you were able to write it without making it into a porn show. It's tastefully done (or at least as tasteful as cutting erotica can be
). You've done a good job of looking into the minds of those involved, although you seem to switch from the woman's point of view to the man's. It would probably be easier to follow (and easier to extract empathy from the audience) if you stayed "in the head" of one or the other. Consistency goes a long ways.
Here are a couple of additional notes:
* "Crawling up his body was a site worth seeing" - it should be "sight" and not "site."
* "a small harmless looking cut" - "harmless-looking" should be hyphenated, since it is a single two-word adjective.
* Both "More cuts appearing littered across his chest" and "Each one making him moan and squirm" are sentence fragments. Fragments can be useful in some cases, but they don't seem to add anything in this instance. Just thought I'd point that out.
Overall, I think this was expertly crafted, with an eye towards "making the story felt." Nicely done, and best of luck to you in the contest and in all of your writing!
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Thanks!
Thanks for the criticism. I can always handle it when it isn't cruel. Thank you for pointing out those little flaws, they're things that once you know what it is supposed to say your mind just skips over.
I'm very happy that I made it to the final round and this was the only new piece I had that I thought was going to be up to any kind of standard.
I actually wrote this story because my other half writes a lot of erotica and while sometimes I do I'm better with other writings so he challenged me into writing it. So it was written for his benefit.
I don't like it when erotica isn't as tasteful as it could be so I'm glad my story falls into tasteful quality.
Thanks again for the comment and I appreciate this contest and the chance to see if I can be the best.
^.^
Angel
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As I should be. That makes a chill go down my spine and in a good way. As always, your stories, along with Malevolent Desire, do bring a certain danger that is all the more arousing to read. Excellent piece.
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...............sexy..........
very...kinky...i like it, keep it up...
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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